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I promised myself i wouldn't cry

I told myself a horrid lie

I gave you my heart as a whole

You took it from me and you stole

The soul i thought was made for you

The things i freely gave to you

I heard your hand crush through my breast

And felt warm blood run down my chest

You walked away with no regrets

My broken heart pinned to your chest

I tried to do my utmost best

To stand back up and give a fight

But here I sit and cry these tears

Now i have these painful fears..

I promised myself i wouldnt cry

I hate you now

This is goodbye

Author's Note

Any errors?

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

We need those tears to release the pain and hurt. A very sad poem. Heart need to mourn losses and celebrate victories. A strong ending to a sad poem.
Coyote

[KatiePie]

This is gorgeous, its brutally honest, and what makes it so beautiful is that it isn't afraid of diving deep into the soul of a person to find out what the real inspiration is, the pain, the problem.Its poems like these that make emotions the reader themselves can't understand, make some sense. Thank you for sharing. :) This made for an amazing read.

[Matthew Kult]

Such a sad story, a few errors but nothing that took away from the write. Just run it through word. I like the rhyme I like when you needed to break off you did. I think the breaks added to the bitterness. Great write.

With Love,

Jaidyn

[Haifa]

Great but sad. I like it, I see some errors but English is not my language too so I am afraid. At all your poem is nice, dark, sad and great.