B*****s Regrets

B*****s, b*****s near and far

Your Daddy wonders where you are

Are you sleeping in your bed?

Or are you with some guy instead?

 

B*****s, b*****s near and far

I bet you could get so far

Without being on the street

And hooking up with every guy you meet

 

B*****s, b*****s near and far

I bet you feel cool in his car

With your head between his legs

Doing everything he begs

 

B*****s, b*****s near and far

Driving around in another car

Passing buildings, people and streets

Eager for the place to meet

 

B*****s, b*****s near and far

Now look how scared you are

your tests came in

You no longer grin

 

B*****s, b*****s near and far

Crying inside of your car

Because the ugly truth came through

There are diseases inside of you

 

B*****s. b*****s near and far

No one will understand how ashamed you are

When you walk through the door and your parents start crying

Because they know their daughter is dying

 

B*****s, b*****s near and far

Now you regret going in those cars

And all that "love" that didn't last

Because you lived your life too fast

 

B*****s, b*****s near and far

Now you are in the back of another car

One that will take you to your place

But instead of alive you are in a case

 

B*****s, b*****s near and far

Your Daddy wonders where you are

Are you up above the world so high?

Because you are his diamond in the sky

 

 

Reviews

[Anna]

This poem made me laugh, I love the idea of it. However if you are going to do a rhyme scheme you should make sure your sylebols line up other wise the rhymes don't show through. Thats why i hardly ever use rhyming. The over use of a rhyme can also make it ineffective, like "Far and car" are used a lot, so it started to loose its effect closer to the end. However you have a really great angle here that could be used to your advantage.

[Chula]

Ok, thank you for the advice lol I shall try it in future writing :)