Patience
A Poem by
Chuba kichu
Dedicated to every man who face problems and obstacles . The outcome of this pain is peace.
Life! Nothing harder.
Struggles for every breath.
Challanged by the day.
Threatened by the dark.
Tempted by our vision.
Will this end?
Patience! A peace awaits.
A peace for all.
For every being that suffers,
Sacrifice, struggles for survival.
As God is just.
© 2015 Chuba kichu
Author's Note
Though its not upto the standard of any poetry readers and not imaginative please bear with it. Open for questions and criticism.
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WOW again, amazing... very profound work!
Tempted by our vision.
Will this end?
^^some times I believe it is better to be blind than to see... as Paul was blinded :D
But we all have to learn to see through the eyes of faith not by our physical eyes.
Nicely penned :DD
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Very true . Your comments encourages me to write more. Thank you mu h.
9 Years Ago
You are very welcome :))
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Perhaps it isn't the target of "poem" for which you were aiming but it reads well and speaks volumes
Posted 8 Years Ago
Perhaps it isn't the target of "poem" for which you were aiming but it reads well and speaks volumes
I like it. Thanks for sharing.
Posted 9 Years Ago
I like it. Thanks for sharing.
9 Years Ago
You are welcome brother.
Yes my brother he is! Wonderful message, thanks for sharing and may God bless
you.
Posted 9 Years Ago
Yes my brother he is! Wonderful message, thanks for sharing and may God bless
you.
9 Years Ago
Thank God brother. Stay safe.
Keep writing. You have room for improvement. And write more.
Posted 9 Years Ago
Keep writing. You have room for improvement. And write more.
9 Years Ago
Sure i will. Thank you :D
WOW again, amazing... very profound work!
Tempted by our vision.
Will this end?
^^some times I believe it is better to be blind than to see... as Paul was blinded :D
But we all have to learn to see through the eyes of faith not by our physical eyes.
Nicely penned :DD
Posted 9 Years Ago
WOW again, amazing... very profound work!
Tempted by our vision.
Will this end?
^^some times I believe it is better to be blind than to see... as Paul was blinded :D
But we all have to learn to see through the eyes of faith not by our physical eyes.
Nicely penned :DD
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Very true . Your comments encourages me to write more. Thank you mu h.
9 Years Ago
You are very welcome :))
I agree. Sometime patience is our greatest strength. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
Posted 9 Years Ago
I agree. Sometime patience is our greatest strength. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
9 Years Ago
Thank you again .. :-D
First, don't hold yourself to the standards of others - too much of that and if it makes sense to you and at least another soul you have made poetry; that is one of the reasons I don't rate poetry here and rather review it.
After all, we are all about words in our works here.
Wonderful piece again that does what I did with my poem Note to Self with less fluff and exposition.
Kudos and keep it up.
Posted 10 Years Ago
First, don't hold yourself to the standards of others - too much of that and if it makes sense to you and at least another soul you have made poetry; that is one of the reasons I don't rate poetry here and rather review it.
After all, we are all about words in our works here.
Wonderful piece again that does what I did with my poem Note to Self with less fluff and exposition.
Kudos and keep it up.
10 Years Ago
Thank you again. May God bless you.
I can see you needed to write this - to give sense and meaning and metaphysical substance to your experience. Nice piece.
Posted 10 Years Ago
I can see you needed to write this - to give sense and meaning and metaphysical substance to your experience. Nice piece.
I really like this, I like how you introduced the poem with the struggles and hardships of life that we all have to face. I also like how you used the word patience, we all need to learn patience and practice it because peace does wait for all if they follow God.
Good Job
Posted 10 Years Ago
I really like this, I like how you introduced the poem with the struggles and hardships of life that we all have to face. I also like how you used the word patience, we all need to learn patience and practice it because peace does wait for all if they follow God.
Good Job
0 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you much. May God bless you.
10 Years Ago
You're welcome
Even though I like it and the message it's conveying is wonderful, I don't think its composition is very creative. Since you use short, choppy sentences, it should be shorter. I'd like it more if it were just the first and last stanza (omitting the middle one).
Posted 10 Years Ago
Even though I like it and the message it's conveying is wonderful, I don't think its composition is very creative. Since you use short, choppy sentences, it should be shorter. I'd like it more if it were just the first and last stanza (omitting the middle one).
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Really? I guess your right. Thanks for your suggestion marguerite.. :-)
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Hi humans,i'm 17 and i'm on the quest of harvesting knowledge .Actually I suck at writing but I love what I do(optional). Religion and spirituality is what I try to express through my works. Besides w..
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