I Don't Believe

I don't believe in men.

I have no faith in them.

"You play with your baby doll,

I will go explore.

Look! See, I caught the ball

You throw like a girl."

I've since learned to recognize

It's man's dynasty

Me they patronize

Patriarchal society

Now when I walk to the park

I always take my knife,

For fear that sometime in the dark

He will take my life.

Condescending

Objectifying

Denying

Bruising

Using

Glass ceiling

Grab me at work

Child marriage

Kidnapped prostitute,

Fix your suit.

Empty flattery

Honeyed lies

Ripped clothes

Rape.

"I love you, Daddy!"

New house, new job, new wife

New children and new life

Go on and twist that knife

"I won't be at your funeral, Dad."

See?

I don't believe in men.

Author's Note

I know it's rough. If the rhyme scheme or structure seems wrong, please point this out to me.

Reviews

[The Twin Arenas]

nah, it's alright. not that rough. you could polish it up, of course, but that just means, like, it's good, y'know?

Totally a patriarchal society. Like, everything we see, the entire reality of everything, is patriarchal. Stinks. I don't know. It sucks. It's weird. Everything in life, like, it's about balance, right? But it's fucked because ALL of it is so tilted in that one direction.

It must be really s****y to feel like (and actually, like, have to) walk around with a knife at night. I never have to. Not fair. It's a drag to me to think about women who are missing out on night.

[Christyn Jeffries]

Thank you.

[Angel Criner]

I used to feel the same way and sometimes the doubt in genuine security among men creeps up today but hopefully there will be one who can show you otherwise with good intentions, love, and compassion. You're a tough cookie and I'm sorry that you've felt this way...
But I know that in a world like this...
It's more than understanding.
Good write... the emotions were truly felt.
Stay strong c:

[Christyn Jeffries]

Thanks for your encouragement.

[Devesh]

I don't know what happened to you, but rest assured that there are better people out there, better men and women. This was clearly written while you were in a very emotional state, and poems like these are very hard to fathom because they deal with experiences which are very very personal.I sincerely hope that you'll meet a person who'll change this outlook of yours. Until then, strength to you. Thanks for sharing :)

[Christyn Jeffries]

Thank you for your kindness.

[Devesh]

You're most welcome.

[Samuel Dickens]

It sounds like you've been badly hurt, a victim of family dysfunction. I went through that, too, and understand what deep wounds are made and the lasting results. Time may not heal all wounds, but it will soothe them. Try to remain strong and keep your head up.

[Christyn Jeffries]

Thank you for your encouragement.

[Chris]

To the Author's Note: The author determines word choice and timing... the work's delivery is set to the author's mind. Anything less takes away the depth of heart and meaning.

To the poem: a comment not critique - A black and white world is a cold and lonely place to live. People ARE flawed, we don't want it that way, don't like it that way... but they are - flawed. The perfect (or merely MORE perfect) get crucified in some manner befitting the anger of the rest of humanity AT their level of perfection. Working at how we want things to be is important - at least to us. But THAT sight is not always held in the same level of regard by others. Getting slapped hurts and yet anger is not reasoned - only revenge is.

The hardest part of listening ...is being heard.

Chris

[Christyn Jeffries]

I know. I wrote this poem right after I was betrayed by my father, who was to me the representative for men. I was a bit biased at the time.

[Roland Sivar]

I like how you vary the pace and move in and out of rhyme.

Don't lose hope, good people are rare, let alone their gender.

[Christyn Jeffries]

Thank you for your review. I know that there are good men out there, just like there are good women. It isn't fair of me to declare all men bad. Sometimes though, I feel like I don't know any good ones.

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Psalms 118:8 says it all with your write:)

[Christyn Jeffries]

Ha, true that.

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Smilesssssssssssssssssssss I knew ud like that:)

[MsJewel]

I like the structure and rhyme scheme. What really struck me about this poem is the emotion I could feel when reading it - I believed you. Great writing~

:) Julie

[Christyn Jeffries]

Thank you. I'm glad what I was feeling when I wrote it came through to you. Mission accomplished!

[Sasha]

Very Interesting Writing !
Loved it !

[Christyn Jeffries]

Thank you!

[Tina Kline]

A very powerful and emotional poem. Very gripping....it has impact.
Perfect the way it is.

[Christyn Jeffries]

Thanks. I'm glad it turned out well.