Trapped

Get out, get out

Lock the door

help, help, help

they don't hear her screams anymore

Bending and breaking

body left black and blue

what will it take

this never ended "soon"

Hands all over

body numb

trapped deep inside

finally to the pain, succumb

drip drip

leaky faucet echoing

but each and every sound

to her is barreling

Slow the breathing almost to a halt

No one ever understands its

but it's always her fault

drag the blade, one last time

everything goes red, then goes dark

peaceful sleep and she will be fine

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Not too bad. I think you could do with a bit more dynamic of an ending - as it stands it's a little passive for my tastes, and it makes the piece come across as a static retelling of events with no real development or intrigue.