Village of the Damned

This is a random poem that I wrote in 2008, according to the dates on the Word file.

The flashing of lightning brightens the sky

The rain almost flooding the beaten ground

I stand here and find myself wondering why

In the busiest village, there’s no one around

 

The village, usually so full of life,

So still and silent on this dreadful night

I can see no one, no man and no wife,

And all i can sense is fear and fright

 

I see a faint silhouette in the dark

But it moves too quick for my eyes to see

I don’t hear the noises of footsteps or hooves

As my mind starts to wonder “What could it be?”

 

Just as the question vacates from my mind

I hear noises that don’t belong in this world

Whatever it is came fast from behind

The strike to the head sends me into a swirl

 

The village fades, my ears full of ringing,

I fall to the ground, my hands on my head

In the distance i hear the faint sound of singing

And wonder if i’m still alive, or dead.

 

When i come too, panic floods to my heart

It is still dark so it didn’t last long

I kneel up, and all around my eyes dart

Trying to see if anything’s wrong

 

But the village, exactly the same as before

But now i see many shapes in the dark

I try to lift myself up from the floor

As one of the creatures lets out a bark

 

A Flash of lightning shows me my foe

Wolf like creatures, like something out of a dream

I look for places to run to, places to go

And to my surprise i hear a mournful scream

Author's Note

I wrote this 5 years ago, be gentle. The rhyming scheme may be off or not make sense at all. It's also unfinished but wanted to upload something on my first day.

Reviews

[GlacialStars]

Nuh! Don't write anymore! O:< Leave it as that! It creates a sort of incomplete image and it's great because it leaves suspense. I personally like it. It leaves us to wonder where is the character and why is his village so empty...Is it that he's diving into a pool of solitude and finds himself trapped into a hell that he himself created? Or was it just a random story with no moral but beautiful as it is?

[Riley Mistwood]

I think the imagery it creates is very good and scary at times. nicely done.

[Christopher J]

Thanks :)

Even though it's 5 years on, do you think I should try and carry it on and get to a conclusion or just leave it as it is?

[Riley Mistwood]

I think you could add a bit after the mournful scream, the rest I think is great. It really paints a picture in the readers mind.

[}Echo{]

I really like this. It's cool. I like the attitude and flow of the poem. It's great. Keep writing. :)

[Christopher J]

Thanks :)