Square Imperfections

Let's build a box.

Just a simple box large enough

For two people.

I'll ask you what we need

And you respond:

"All we need is each other."

So we build the box

With nothing inside.

It's frame is perfect,

But I know that it may leak one day

Under the heavy rain.

I predict a storm,

And so do you.

It's an inevitable occurrence

As the box lay in a grassy field

--slumberous trees at the horizon--

Sinking within the earth year by year.

You need light?

I cut a square hole

And a sheet of perfectly clear glass

Shields us from the weather,

--but we know the storm is coming--

I know the glass will not always remain clear,

But with a sheer of cloth,

I'll wipe it clean--from time to time.

And the box begins to sink

Like the heavy brick it is.

"One day, the door will not open,"

I tell you in pants.

"One day, the door will remain shut."

You breathe a soft breath.

And the trees grow larger.

They grown closer.

The grass grows higher.

And we begin to sink.

The window remains dirty.

The doors remain closed.

"Let's build a box,"

I tell you.

"Let's build a box in the sky."

Author's Note

This is a bit different and more stretched out than the typical subjects of my writing (my poetry anyways). I hope that maybe someone out there gets one of the many meanings behind it. Overall, do enjoy though!

--Christoph Poe

Reviews

[Mary Christabel George]

Yes it has many meanings depends on how the readers perceive it. As different people have different perceptions. All i feel is - This is about Love & the graph the love life goes through. With Box, Storm, glass, grass used as references from real life. Wish all get some one really special to build the box, live in it, cherish it & be there till its in sky.
I might be wrong in the understanding of it.
But,I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
:)

[Christoph Poe]

Actually, you pretty much hit that nail dead on the head! :D I'm happy to hear that you understood it--and felt it, it seems. Thank you for reading! :)

--Christoph Poe

[Mary Christabel George]

You are welcome.
:)

[MandaBear]

I enjoyed this very much! I think this is sweet. I love it. Thank you for sending this to me so I could read it.

[Christoph Poe]

Thank you for reading it! Happy to hear you enjoyed it and understood it as well. :)

[Caitlin Lea]

Wow. I...LOVE this. Like, truly. I really really love it. At this moment, I do not know what to say about it other than it blows me away. It's amazing. Giving you a rating of 100, and sharing with my friends. WELL DONE!! :D

[Christoph Poe]

Wow, thank you kindly for your thoughts. :) It's nice to see my work appreciated.

[N!LoC]

this paints a very nice picture in my mind.. but its very open to interpretation... so whats the meaning behind it?

[Christoph Poe]

Really, about how nature will take us over at some point. We'll wither, die, and become part of the earth again. The last line is that part about giving up, because it doesn't matter how hard you try to escape death--it's inevitable. In a sense, I've tried creating "death" by using the "life" of nature.

[N!LoC]

yowza... now reading it again takes on a whole new meaning now that i know where the inspiration was "stemming" from... (pun intended) lol :-)

[Christoph Poe]

Haha, I needed you to get that effect the first time around though. I might revise it, but I'm not too sure. I feel like my revisions on my poetry fail every time. **shrugs**

[N!LoC]

oh no no no.. c'mon dont revise your masterpieces... well maybe a few word tweaks or two... but no... what flows out from ur head to writing the first time is always the best ... in my opinion :-)

[Christoph Poe]

I feel the exact same way! I noticed u had a typo though up there. I'll fix that. Lol. But I highly doubt ill want to do much more. I like the effortlessness behind the thoughts of poetry. I can tell when it's been forced. I see a lot of that here.

[Christoph Poe]

...**I** had a typo....

[Jack...]

Very cool concept and delivery. I like how this started and where it went. Nice work.

[Christoph Poe]

Thanks man! :)

I was seriously going to come visit your page tonight and see what new works you've created. Ironic how you were the first to comment on this. Haha. I'll hopefully get to it tonight when I've got real time to sit and analyze. I haven't been on here in a good minute so I've got some catching up to do!

And thanks again for looking at this. :) Its a lot different from what I normally write so I wasn't too sure how'd it's work? I kinda just pulled it out of a hat to tell the truth.

Anyways, thanks! Talk to you soon.

--Chris