The Contradiction

If you're not offended by strong language, go ahead. Thanks for viewing!

It's not really--

Beautiful.

Such a Depression

Stretched beyond the reaches of time

Becoming abstract.

Becoming beautiful.

Becoming array.

Going a speed beyond comprehension.

Vocal cords vibrating beneath a load of heavy water.

Give it up.

Keep struggling.

Keep moving on,
And on,
And on,
And on,
Keep f*****g moving.

And when everything's said and done,

Hum a tune with sounds comprehensible

By one, and only one.

Brush it off.

Rise.

Conquer the shadows on the wall.

And with a cheeky grin,

You--We--I--f*****g rise.

Reviews

[Anna Lynn]

I think this is a clever piece, it just seems a little rushed or something. It may be because I don't write in this style and therefore have nothing to go off of. I definitely get a sense of what you were feeling when you were writing this.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Haha I love this, yes we rise and we keep on rising no matter how many times the world knocks us down. Nicely written.

[Jack...]

Be what you are, let no obstacle stand in your way. Wear no mask to disguise your true feelings, keep moving, leaving the shadows of the past far behind. This was very cool, Chris. It was almost like a prophets rant from a street corner in a busy city. Very nice.

[Coyote Poetry]

"Keep moving on,
And on,
And on,
And on,
Keep f*****g moving."
The above lines are facts. We struggle. Lose and gain. But we must seek a better place. We hope? No weakness in the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Monster ^.^]

A very open poem, open to discussion that is. How I interpret this, however is that no matter how much people contradict your views, your skills, your works-- it is really up to you if you want to "f*****g rise"... keep moving on, that's the way to get over contradictions... and you pretty well pin-pointed that

[Storm K.]

Even though it seems disjointed with the sequence, there is a flow to this piece I really enjoy and I think is very clever. It really leaves the reader thinking, I'm going to have to go and ponder this piece... Nice work :)

[Christoph Poe]

Thank you! I get kinda deep sometimes, and it definitely comes across a bit too obscure sometimes. I'm happy to hear you got something out of it! Most of my pieces don't have a whole lot of organization to them though. I feel like when I try to organize them, it ruins the flow I attempt. **shrugs** or maybe that's just me.

Thanks again!
--Christoph Poe