Voices

Voices in my head

Telling me what to do where to go

They're not my own

I swear to you they don't belong to me

What? You think I'm crazy?

NO

I'm not how many times do I have to tell you that?!

Fine then

I'm leaving this place

Going somewere they understand me

What you know somewhere I could go?

Tell me please

Oh, that's not quite what I had in mind

Please just let me go now

Leave peacefully

And everything will be alright

Reviews

[TheLastEclipse]

It's like you're speaking to someone, denying your own insanity. I've been there ;P
A very constructive write but the structure should be very lavish and just a bit of advice, whenever trying to seem insane or indecisive use really strong adjective and adverbs that express your emotions.
85/100

[C.E.Grey]

Thank you immensely for the very constructive review, I love them :)

[G.A. Collins]

I really enjoyed the beginning of this piece, and I like the fact that the speaker seems to be talking aloud to someone else in more of a broken dialogue that we can't hear...but the ending looses a bit of its heaviness...it just becomes a little, I don't know, ordinary? I just feel like there should be some climax at the end, perhaps some sort of recognition on the speakers behalf, referring once again to the voices, saying something about perhaps how they seem to understand you, when no one else can...it'd bring more of a sentimental value to the poem, and make it more captivating and haunting...

[Jack Reaper]

well that couldve come right out of my own head. i like the structure, written as though combating the voices. i loved it.

[C.E.Grey]

Thank you much