Someone in this Picture

Written for my estranged son, Dennis Shanaberg!

SOMEONE IN THIS PICTURE

 

Someone in this picture

Is lying;

Could it be that the truth

Was a lie;

Could it be that the lie

Was true;

Someone in this picture

Is lying;

Now, I am the judge

Of the truth;

I am not listening,

Anymore;

I am deciding what

Is true;

I can listen with

My own ears;

I can see with

These eyes;

I can, finally, say

This is true

And, unfortunately, that

Was a lie;

I can know in

My heart

And, maybe, my world

Will change;

There is something wrong

With this picture

And I will search to

Find what.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Jenny Nelson]

Our kids...!!!??? Wonderful write. You get your concern and frustration across quite well. Always trying to figure out what's going on and where it went wrong. I think most parents, especially of older children, will really appreciate this write. Well done.

[Alana]

I sense an internal conflict. Do you see yourself in the picture? Or do you see pieces of yourself, as in your family? I loved this, it felt like a restless sort of lament. But there is hope at the end, in your declaration to find what went wrong. Beautiful :)

[Augustus]

I can see frustration, and I can see a frantic search for what went wrong... Portrayed beautifully with the picture metaphor.. The opening line "Something in this picture is lying" says it all so vividly...
I hope you find what is wrong with the picture soon and set it right...

[THE LOST ROSE]

I really enjoyed this piece. I like the flow and I like the word play. Kinda of laid back as if you are still trying to come down off of that high!

[Antonio Valentino]

What else can we do but search for the truth? Little do we know when they are young and we can do no wrong, how different things can turn out. I can't think of a worse thing then not having your children in your lives. This was very sad, but hopefull.

I wish you and the fam all the best.
Antonio

[Susie Q]

I have always said, "no matter what lie might be told to your unknowing small child", the day will come when they are grown, they will seek the truth.

[Wicahpi]

Kids can hurt us worse than any one sometimes,
vica versa. A complicated world we live in.

[Nianque]

Wonderful just simply wonderful ! :)

[TTBoy28]

Very nice.

[TheKaylaPup]

it reads like it should be confusing, but it makes perfect sense, i like that. Good work. =)