no such thing

Inspired by a song from John Mayer.

sleep the dreams

 

of peacefulness

 

tranquility becomes me

 

with you and

 

love is the one

 

entity I've searched for

 

all these years

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

i look for dreams of peacefulness away from all daily cares and worries,i look for tranquility and piece of mind,i look for you ,loving me i searched all these years ,i want to rest and enjoy my life with you ,this is nice short and to the point,i see so much sadness ,i feel it,i see you have tried a lot and now you just wish for some peace and love ,nice ,lots of feelings behind those few words,i really wish you find your peace at last...

[TL Boehm]

wow Christel this is a nice one.

[Robert Luna]

The impossibility of finding peace where the searching for something that seems to lay there beyond our reach. In shadows the words of inspiration linger awaiting us like slumbering giants with their own purpose and reasons. I love the intense thoughts that flooded my head as I read these words. You are a master of saying so much with so little. Wonderfully written and so capturing.


Great Job!!!!!!

[zig]

nice emjambment in this "with you and... love is..." that could be read a couple of different ways, all good i think, very effective i thought. great flow, mood, etc, i liked it very much.

endings have always been difficult for me to write. all poems have to end somehow, most of mine end badly, or i guess weakly is a better way to describe it. the last line here kind of trails off, goes nowhere. is there sometime else you would rather say with that last line?

all the same, enjoyed this very much my friend, thanks for sending it to me

zig

[Pink Poison]

This is an awesome poem. It says so much with so few words. That takes a lot of talent to pull of! You sense of peacefulness is conveyed perfectly and the sense of having found a refuge from the world in your love is a beautiful concept. I also like the implication of a quest, like you have been searching for a treaure, and love is indeed something to treasure. Well done!

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

sleep is the arms around you isn't it.... this is simply perfect

Kath

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

i must say you pack great emotion in this little piece... love is tricky and hard to find no doubt.

[darkgurl]

I like this piece, very well created and and written, you have an unique style, very well written write...Kim

[Michael X]

I really like the style you use here, its crafty, creative and unique,
this read like a meditative ponder, and speaks valumes, beautifully done.

[Tenten]

gentle words, soft flow, it carries mellow, nice work.