give 'em the boot

i wish

i could squish

your mind under my

thick - soled

boot - tramping

leather-stomping

splatter your scattered

thoughts across

the 2 am fuzzy screen

screaming

"you thought you knew me"

 

Author's Note

Thank you Siobhan! You are my hero! : )

Reviews

[Cold Coffee Magazine]

"These boots were made for walking,
And thats just what they'll do.
And one of these days these boots are
gonna walk all over you."

(come on boots)

Nice little diddy, eh? Your piece remindsof this. And its funny too. I see a mad kitten face. Standing fur.

Dave

[Nicholas Hallows]

Congratulations on the Slam contest!
NH

[Travis Lawrence]

Ouch, this gives me a headache haha. I like how you spaced it out so when I read it the lines seem short and spacey, but the poem has a violent power to it that contrasts with the line breaks. It's definitely interesting!

[Jesse F Hayes]

L O V E I T.

OMG - hits a personal note. Faves! And technically - love the rhythm of the piece. This one would do very well in a poetry reading. It has a meter that lends itself to being spoken aloud.

[DarkAngelWriter]

:D I LOVE IT!

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

A great piece, short and simple. Using this as a slam piece might be difficult though, if you don't use enough expression and force in the words. Still, would be a fun piece to see.

[Jinx]

Powerful and in-your-face. LOVE it! It's funny, I was thinking of that song by Nancy Sinatra. LOL Good write. And Sio rocks for inspiration! =)

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

wow this one is full of anger and discontentment...

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

I know I reviewed this before and liked it - it kicks butt - glad it was found ..... Think I need to try these on for size and take care of some bidness!

Kath

[justink :):)]

wow very powerful