Break, broke, broken.

This is a poem which was originally written by me in Dutch, so it isn't great in English. Still hope you like it =)

Break, broke, broken.
We were happy
No mountain too high
to climb
for us and our love

Puppy love
was whispered
behind our backs

But for me
it was
really
real love.

Break, broke, broken.

You loved me
Do you still do?
I wouldn't know

We said
Our love was
forever

But is that possible?
Is it possible if one
one of the two
past by?

Break, broke, broken.

Left tears
Now tired of everything
Want to sleep forever
But won't give in
for you.

Break, broke, broken.

Clouds break open
light reflects
Tears are dried
The desire gets stronger

The still desire
of you
Desire of warmth,
a hug, a shoulder,
to cry on.

Break, broke, broken.

There's nothing left
of me
Since the day
you left me

Since you left and
disappeared
A empty cover
without a soul stayed
With me

Petrified
at the moment
there's nothing left of me
you're dead and I

Break, broke, am broken.

Author's Note

If you see any mistake in language, please tell me. English is not my mother tongue, so it's not more than logical that I'll make mistakes from time to time. Enjoy.

Reviews

[Lau]

Well, I think it's great in English!
And I like the repeat of: Break, broke, broken.
I think it makes the poem even more powerful!
Great! :)

[Dreamer (Kristen)]

......Hai, I loved the poem, but.......
At the part: You loved me
Do you still do?
I shouldn't know
I feel that -wouldn't- would fit a bit better instead of -shouldn't-...............
But that's just me........
Laterzzzzzzzzz!

[PasDeChat]

That is very powerful and speaks of the strength of love and love lost. I am not sure if the loss is a result of death, but that is the feeling I get! A love lost by death would be even harder for the one 'left behind"

"There's nothing left
of me
Since the day
you left me"

This is my favorite part.. it is so true of feeling of loss of your "true love".

[Expression]

I love it, But you already knew that :')