Within

Writing is my invitation to come and see what I see

        

 

What can I say

That's not been said

Or do that's not been done

What road is there

Still untraversed

What race that's still unrun

 

And where is there

A virgin land

Where no one else has been

Where is that place

That untouched world

Whose sights remain unseen

 

I know of only

One such place

Which I alone can find

And none but me

Can claim to see

The world within my mind.

Reviews

[John McGrael]

dude....

my contest has 5 places....
... this is down to the final 6

i HATE IT man, but i gotta take off this poem, i just randomly picked which one i would take off and urs got picked

im sorry
but please know this poem is very inspiring and i really hate that i have to kick it off
but i do man, SORRY!!

[Cherrie Palmer]

great job, very clever.

[samantha]

wow i loved it its awesume very well writin poem

[Ivor]

After reading all your poetry on this site, I was reluctant to comment on this one and would have prefered to post on one with less reviews. However, kept getting drawn back to it, the presentation, feel, rhythm, rhyme and especially the subject make it an outstanding piece.

As a lunitic rhyming poet myself a lot of my work is read between the lines and creeps into the depths of one's mind so I found it refreshing to listen to your comparasons of the mind to virgin territory that people seldom explore fully.

Like you I have published little on this site but my work is extremely diverse and this I found in the other work of yours I have read with no restrictions of where your pen takes you. I seldom get the chance to look in at the poetry sites but it is work of this nature that makes the effort worthwhile. I sincerely hope I see more of your rhyming poetry as to be honest this is the medium I enjoy and have a passion for.

Thanks for the read,

Ivor

[Snuggles McClintock]

well put, and I love the way you withheld imagery to illustrate your point!

[Manyfacets]

An Excellent poem! The presentation, and rhyming treatment are top notch. It's not trite, or self indulgent. The thought behind this is lovely. Smiles M

[deeps]

I really enjoyed this write here
This is lovely and so wonderful
Very well written.

[roofatron]

That, my friend, is a corker.
The feeling that there is nothing left to be found, that there are no adventures to be had that haven't already been had. So very well put, a very light touch.
Good work mate.

[SLAlexander]

Enjoyed this. Very honest.

[imawriter]

This is a wonderful poem. I understand well the feeling. I used to have a favorite place in the woods that I could go where i could write, cry, even scream if I felt like it. the surrounded land was purchased by a hunting club. It's too dangerous for me to go there now. It's sad.

[Literature Writer]

Wow. This poem is written very well. It is also a very interesting poem. I can picture an 'Untouched World" and a "Virgin Land". A very creative piece of writing indeed.