To Wake Up Early

Just a few thoughts about how I feel about early mornings.

No alarms, no light but your awake.

Staring at the ceiling of your bedroom you cling

to your dream hoping for more. 

Your dreams now fading from memory as

you prepare yourself to rise. 

Desperately trying to hold onto your dreams,

you start your day. 

The sun is late you think,

Maybe your just too early. 

Routine kicks in so you stop caring so much. 

Automated processes rule your morning now.

You accepted it years ago. 

Now your coffee is impeccable, everyone at the office

thinks so. 

The sun finally makes its debut for the day.  

You greet it on your way to work, savouring the peace

before cramming yourself into the overpopulated 

world of business. 

The day goes on, you start to miss the morning. 

The morning that offered you peace and tranquility but 

you couldn't appreciate it. 

Now you beg for it but only when it's too late. 

Author's Note

Just tell me your honest thoughts. I just do this for fun so be honest haha.

Reviews

[Chris]

Honest thoughts huh? Do this for YOU not for fun... write of your life and being you so that later on you can look back and actually see who you are/were as a real person and not just a time/life flavored memory.

I got a fair view of a person - becoming ...from this.

Welcome to WC.

[Hermit]

Haha thanks for the welcome. Yeah I like writing for multiple reasons like I do some romance novels for myself and all that. I like the honestly in the poems but I do also sometimes like to fabricate some emotions into a experience to play around with perspective haha. Thanks for the review though it was very insightful.

[Kaleb Shumway]

Reminds me of a poem by Donald Hall called "The Man in the Dead Machine". I like the idea, and its fairly relatable. I don't know if you wanted it this way, but it seems like there is alot of imagery missing from the poem. It seems a little flat because there isn't any concrete description of how you see the "memories" or "dreams" or even how you see the "Automated processes". Are they beneficial or not? Adding those kinds of descriptions through imagery or well chosen adjectives would add a really nice layer to the poem and clarify how you view this phenomenon.

[Hermit]

Thanks for the feedback. I will take your advice to heart next time I decide to write. A part of me wanted the poem to be flat but I do see where you are coming from.

[TheJordBaker]

Thanks for sharing and welcome to the forum. I enjoyed reading the piece as I could relate to a lot of what was said, which was honest and natural.

[Hermit]

Thanks for the review. I like honest poems about daily items and experiences so I tend to try my hand at it whenever it's applicable.