The Heartache of Love

The Heartache of Love

You know I’m here for as long as I can

To make you smile when times are bad

My soul mate you are, so please understand

My heart just wont let me make you feel sad

I can’t tell you things that I know will just add

To the heartache and grief that you already have

I can’t, nor wont ever make you cry

My dreams all entail your beautiful smile 

I cant be the person who adds to your woes

This isn’t your worry so I cannot impose

The problems I have and my wounded soul

I will get through whatever my future does hold

I will do it alone just myself and my hope

For as long as you’re happy, forever I’ll cope

In the short but colourful life that I’ve had

I appreciate the good times and even the bad

The past times of pain, I thought forever would stay

I never imagined I’d reach twenty eight

The mistakes that I've made, I know that they're vast

But however much shameful, they’re all in the past

They’re the reasons behind the Man that I am

The realisation and understanding of life’s master plan

For in the end it was fate that led me to you

An un-dieng love that will always be true

From the moment we met, I would have given up my life

To make you feel happy and special inside

For my soul reason in life is making you smile

To make you feel happy and never feel down

To protect you forever, always be there for you

To show you a love so precious and true

To tell you each day the dazzling beauty that’s you

These words that I say will forever be true

For you my angel, you’re my heart and soul  

We gave each other contentment neither had known

For whatever now the future does hold

Just know that my heart will always be yours

Like an eternal candle that’s shining so bright

In this life and the next I’ll be there by your side

A love that’s so strong it could never wilt or die

There’s a star in the sky that’s just yours and mine

By Chris Atkinson 

Reviews

[StefanC]

This really is beautiful.
In particular I found the third verse to be extremely relatable and the last verse to be very touching.
Verse three's ideas of past pain sculpting the person you are now really struck a chord with me and I'm sure most would be able to relate to it.
The final verse is really lovely, hinting nicely that your love transcends time, giving the poem more depth.

Brilliant work.

[Chris Atkinson]

Thank you Stefan for your kind words and review, your words are very much apriciated. The poem is all about the love of my life and what we were going through at the time. I look forward to reading your first chapter Stefan. Thanks again

[K writes]

This is such a wonderful and beautiful write

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Man, I wish I could go back to 28! Lol. But the poem is good. It can almost be turned into a song.

[Chris Atkinson]

Haha me to Kena. Don't worry though, I thought you were younger than 28, you are looking fantastic. Thank you very much for your reviews.

[Gregory Stires]

I think this poem is really beautiful. I love how you describe the significant other in such a deep and passionate manor as well as the imagery you give with the words you have written.

[Ashley Griffiths]

This is a piece that really wears its heart on its sleeve.

[marie]

lovely poem!:) one thing to say though third vera fifth line soul should be sole, could you explain to me the pattern in the varying lines with the verses? i'm not sure i quite understand how you got it to flow with differing amounts of lines and i would love to know your trick to it!:)

[Chris Atkinson]

Thank you very much for your review Marie, really appriciate it. its just the speed that changes through some verses. Its hard to explain without me reading it to you, but its just the speed that changes. Thanks again for your review Maria :)

[marie]

anytime!:) thanks for explaining it:)

[Maddy Paige]

This was incredibly beautiful. I especially loved the last line... It made me smile like I'm sure it did for the girl this was written for :)

[Chris Atkinson]

Thank you very much Maddy, I realy apriciate your review. I do hope that it made her smile. I am glad you enjoyed it Maddy, thanks again :)

[John Anderson]

This is beautifully expressed

[Chris Atkinson]

Thanks John you're reviews are greatly apreciated mate.

[Da Leigh]

This is a beautiful poem and you seem like a very sweet man. It is apparent that you have been through a lot, but you do not seem the need to lay your worries on others, especially the one that you love. You live to see her smile and that is true love on your part.

There are two punctuation mistakes that I can help you out with if you are interested.

[Chris Atkinson]

Thank you very much mor your kind words and review Da Leigh, its realy apriciated. yes defenatly, any help on mistakes I have made with punctuation would be apriciated, thanks very much.

[Da Leigh]

You are quite welcome! Here are the mistakes that I noticed.

In the following line you should put a comma after the word are to show a brief pause.
"My soul mate you are so please understand"

I can’t nor wont ever make you cry"
In this line I would have put a comma after can't and ever because the line would still make sense without that part.

In the following line, it should be they're, not there.
"The mistakes that I've made, I know that there vast"

[Chris Atkinson]

Thank you for you're help and noticing the grama error Da Leigh, its realy apriciated. thanks again for you're review and I am happy you enjoyed it :)

[FireFox9]

I love the way you write Chris. The length and rhymes make it much more interesting. Fox-

[Chris Atkinson]

Thanks again for your kind reviews firefox9, they are realy apriciated