Soul Mates

Soul Mates

My love for you is a melody

If I lost my sight I still could see

As love is blind, you’re my symphony

Of love of life and good memories

Your smiles a Gift not only to me

But to the world for all to see

An eternal love that will never die

Like the sun, the moon a star lit sky

I know that in life times do get hard

The death of a loved one is a scar to the heart

I feeling of loss that will never depart

But her memory lives on in all of our hearts

Just know this my angel, I will always be here

To fix your heart to help you heal

To make you feel the joys again 

Of life and hope to ease your pain

The love we have will never fail 

Never die and never frail

Life is short, loves is a gift

The pasts the past, we should never wait

To say the things we know we feel inside

I’ll be here for you always till the end of time 

                                

I’ll always make you feel better inside

I’ll show you a love most will never find

To you my angel I promise blind 

I will always be here by your side

By Chris Atkinson

Reviews

[Rick r]

Overall a good poem. A couple of comments on the structure:
Should you try to cut the fourth stanza down to four lines like the rest of the poem? Seems somewhat dis-jointed with the two additional lines.
Third stanza, third line: Should "I feeling" be I'm feeling or A feeling?
The general rhyme scheme is good but the fifth stanza doesn't stick to the pattern, and in some stanzas the end rhymes don't follow the line pattern. If that is intentional as a technique, then maybe try to find a pattern within that. If not, then possibly try to make the rhyme pattern consistent throughout.
Again, a good poem with a good flow. Thanks for sharing.

[Chris Atkinson]

Thank you for the review and advice Rick

[Yaren]

Wonderful. I feel each word ...
You know its a good one when you immediately understand and FEEL

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

So beautifully written. Thanks for sharing.

[bleumango]

Good, sweet poem. Well done.

[Sami Khalil]

A gift from the gifted. Love...Bravo....

[Cryingkate]

Pretty Neat...She's a Lucky Girl.

[Brian M. Peeples]

I really enjoyed this. Good job! But I have to say there was one part that bothered me.

"Life is short, loves is a gift
The pasts the past, we should never wait"

Do you mean "loves" as in "love's is a gift," or "love is a gift"?
And is it supposed to be "The past's the past"? Just asking to clarify my curiosity. But overall, great work!

[John Anderson]

The imagery in this is so vivid an your words flow really great.. Wonderful descriptive poem!

[Chris Atkinson]

Thanks very much for you're review John, much apriciated and I'm happy you enjoyed it.

[Pure Innocence]

This is a beautiful and very enduring poem. I loved it :)

Just know this my angel, I will always be here
To fix your heart to help you heal
To make you feel the joys again
Of life and hope to ease your pain
The love we have will never fail
Never die and never frail

[Chris Atkinson]

Thankyou very much for your rewiew, its much apruviated. I'm glad you enjoyed it x

[FireFox9]

To you my angel I promise blind. I love that line and the poem. Great work! Fox-

[Chris Atkinson]

Thanks very much for the review Fox, much apriciated and glad you enjoyed it.