Silent Hill

Silent Hill never fails to invoke a sense of foreboding and fear. I wanted to capture the hopelessness one might feel when trapped in this town.

A red mist is flowing

Lost in the fog a brewin'

The walls all close in around me

They echo my name, voices of a memory

Stole my heart and kept it hidden

Locked in there, a place forbidden

 

The bridge is broken, it leads nowhere

The voice has spoken, “How shall I fare?”

Walking into the mist with dancing shapes

With a clammy kiss, my soul was raped

 

Buildings stand tall and hush

Atop this hill where hope is crushed

Red eyes on red bricks

The words on them play devious tricks

 

The shadows, shadows

Are alive in Silent Hill

The meadows, meadows

Where I left my heart on the churning mill

 

The words chase me

Turn the corner and the wall faces me

Trapped here without the key

This town will not let me be!

 

The thrill is gone, it was time to go

Turn the gun, I force my will

But as time began to slow

I knew Silent Hill would not let me go

Reviews

[Writer #00]

a 'brewing-->a-brewing, apostrophes are used as either posessive or to take the place of an omittance such as the 'o' in can't...nothing is missing from 'brewing', if you wanted to have an apostrophe, you could use: a-brewin'--or--a brewin' : )

You definitely did a good job capturing a sense of captivity and hopelessness (I haven;t seen Silent Hill or played the game, so I can't compare the two, but I'm sure you did it justice). I love your imagery and your good use of rhyming. I was honestly haunted by reading this, "hope is crushed", "trapped without the key"...and that last line, the way you personify the Hill adds even more to the hauntingness of it. Well done.

[Christopher Angel]

Thank you for pointing out that mistake. I'll make the change :)

I'm glad you were haunted by it - well not glad but glad...you know? Silent Hill freaked me out lots so I'm happy you who never played the games or watched the movie could feel what I felt to a degree.

[Writer #00]

I do know. It's like when someone thought I was a self-harming psycho after reading one of my poems and I took it as a compliment. : )

[Christopher Angel]

Heh yeah - if I could get someone to vicariously live through me then I've done my job!

[Writer #00]

Yeppers.....!

[Dye]

Great image of the town. I played this game when it first came out, I think 99 or 2000, before the movie. It was creepy. Had to see the movie after that came out and your poem does it justice for sure.

[Christopher Angel]

Thank you. I wanted to capture the feel of the games but superimposed with the imagery of the film. The sense of foreboding and hopelessness tinged with creepiness. It was a task trying to get all of that in this simple poem.

[Mizo4]

I love the imagery which is frightening cos jinkies imagine being trapped in silent hill, such a brilliant movie

[Christopher Angel]

Yeah the movie was creepy. The games were creepier!

[Mizo4]

gosh the idea of playing those games would just make me have a heart attack, found the film beautiful and poetic well the first one mostly, it had deep imagery and symbolic story to the persucution of pagan withches which made it my favourite horror movie of all time.

[Rob Santana]

Killer piece man, you created good imagery.

[Christopher Angel]

Thank you! I'm real glad you enjoyed it

[Ben]

Very good. It was a chilling and spooky read. I loved the repitition of "shadows" and "meadows". It really painted a picture for me, and although I'm reading this in a brightly-lit room of a 10 AM sun, I think the room just got a little darker.

[Christopher Angel]

Wow, thank you - I never thought, while writing, that the words and rhythm I chose would be particularly spooky but I'm glad it resonated!

[TrimarcoRansome]

I love your use of words!
'Walking into the mist with dancing shapes
With a clammy kiss, my soul was raped'
These in particular grabbed me, your poetry is heartfelt which is always the best. Your rhyming stanzas add impact and work perfectly.
Personally I loved this poem, well penned and a mature use of words, great work! Keep it coming!!

[Christopher Angel]

Thank you so much. I truly appreciate your kind words. I wanted every word to be relevant to the poem no matter how obscure they may seem but I am glad they grabbed you the way they did