A Sliver of Time

I've put so much work into making my other poems rhyme that I decided to just wing it with this one without rhyming. I think it came out pretty good.

A Sliver of Time

By chris WIlson

How privileged we are to be here today

This precarious period of time

Perched between Mankind's greatest achievements

And Mankind's greatest fall

How blessed we are to bare witness

This final cacophony of cycles converging

This beautifully horrid crescendo

This alignment wont happen again for eons

Drink it in while you have the chance

Because god willing we wont be here for the crash

Reviews

[Bear]

You have a nice vocabulary and seem knowledgeable of words usage, you topic shows an interest in philosophy and deliver a climatic ending. Other than your sentence structure it was masterfully written. Thank you for allow me the pleasure of reading your work.

[Dick Long]

I think your sentence structure is fine the way it is. Well done and unfortunately true.

[sansrity sinha]

smooth flow of thoughts..
really nice vocabulary and great choice of words. It is indeed both fortunate as well as unfortunate to live in such precarious time..
really nice poem!

[Uche Paul]

It is paradoxical that we are privileged to be in a precarious period of time - where we hustle to qualify into the ranks of achievers, least we are tagged to the category of "Mankind's greatest fall". Hahaha... Of course, we must drink in this opportunity while it last, and while we last. For in the "crash", this our precarious period of time, would be tagged a golden Era.

I love this literary piece. It's so concise, wise and witty.

[Chris W.]

Thanks, im glad you liked it. I usually try to keep my poems nice and short. I realy hate adding filler if the piece has already made its point.

[Ivy]

REALLY like this poem! It has a smooth tempo, and your effective use of alliteration definitely adds to it.
It's interesting how you manage to blend gratitude with a sense of futility.
Thanks for a great piece!

[Chris W.]

Thanks, I usually rhyme but since I didn't do that with this one I used alliteration to do the accentuation. I'm really glad someone noticed lol.