Just a dream...

In my arms she lay
Breathing gently
Motionless we stayed
The warmth of her body
The smell of her skin
Could feel her soul deep within
She turned to me
She smiled
I didn’t say a word
Just closed my eyes
She turned to the other side
A tear drop rolled
I felt her cry
My arms fell empty
I was waiting for a goodbye

I opened my eyes
And she was gone
Found myself all alone
In the dark, on my bed
I knew it was a dream
Just my imagination
As real as it seemed
As real as it felt
I know she’s dead
But there were tear drops
On the side she slept

Reviews

[Philip Muls]

Quite a dream. Well done.

[Fran Marie]

I know she’s dead
But there were tear drops
On the side she slept

very sad.. the ending verse is quite eerie...a well penned piece
thanks for entering this in my contest

[Goat]

Ooh spooky and sad. This is well written and keeps the readers attention through the whole thing. Good job!

[Christopher Paul]

Thank you.

[Thoren]

Great read. Great flow and choice of words to describe the moment. You may want to try dropping hints to the reader she may be dead. Describing the smell, something like "Posey's", related to death. Just my opinion. Great Job!

[Christopher Paul]

Thank you for your comment. About the hints, see I don't like giving hints. I like giving a sudden twist to the story. You start reading, it about a couple then BAM, someone's been dead the whole time. Kinda like The Sixth Sense.