Reality comes along

She closes her eyes

And drifts away

Far from the lies, hurt and pain

To a place she can be alone

To a place she can be her own

In her world so warm and bright

She can laugh instead of cry

She can be what she wants to be

She can be free cause no one can see

But fantasies never last very long

For at some point reality comes along

Drags her out from her dream

Reminding her of the place, the person 

She never wants to be

Her smile disappears as her eyes open

To the yelling, the screaming, the family broken

The pain comes back so do the tears

The marks on her face and scars on her wrist reappear

Even though the pain and marks she can hide

Her reality she can never put aside.

Reviews

[Haley]

Fantastic writing with great imagery! Well done.

[Green]

It feels wrong to say I like this considering the subject matter, but that's the only word I know of to use. It's very well written; it just sort of resonates with me.

[MagicAl]

Really LOVE this! Very well written.. :)

[katnisscat]

You are a really good writer. Bravo!!!

[Alicia Schroeder]

Sounds like a younger discription of me, I'm sure many can relate to this, thank you for sharing such an amazing peice :)

[Christopher Paul]

Your most welcome. This piece is actually very relatable because I wrote it purely from experience. Things I and a few people I know (mostly teens) have gone through.

[MoriartyMesa]

What I enjoy is that this is something a reader can know and understand. You painted a nice picture, one or four minor edits are needed, but it is charming, original and honest.

[Christopher Paul]

Feel free to point out the parts you'd like me to change or edit and thank you for the review.

[CoraZanini]

wow..I stayed spechles for few seconds..It's so pure and beautifull also I really feel my writing being immature when I read a piece like this.awesome

[Christopher Paul]

Thank you so much.

[lily]

I really enjoy this poem
well done :)

[Christopher Paul]

Thank you.