Cellophane Man

This is an older piece that I was challenged to write as an assignment and the constraints were a time limit of 30 mins. So, I know it is rushed but, I WAS rushed by the directive.

Cellophane Man

a poem by Chris

 

 

My faithful,dutiful commitment passes through the years

All sacrifices given freely and without measure

The growth of love is my charge

As a Templer Knight protects the grail with his service

 

 

I follow in tow

Stepping  aside in vocation, in residence

My meager hay-pennies add to nothing

And give no meat on the table

 

I am your ever willing cheerleader

When you win; we win

When I  believe; you achieve

My voice rises up above all others

 

I have swept aside other courtiers

I sing like a lark of your beauty, your brilliance

As a town crier alerts its citizens

I tout your praises to signal your holding of my heart

 

From the sidelines I wait

Ever vigilant and silent in my pride

Of the woman you’ve become

And the tower constructed well with crest flown high

 

My love, don’t look past

Don’t look through me like used cellophane

My self-denial has feed your flame

And I give support to your pier

 

Talents can’t be held back much longer

It roars like the bulls of Pamplona

My charge is fierce

For your Maker filled this vessel full

 

Come down from your tower and dry my tear

Take no more meetings and tend to your champion

Wipe my ruddy face with the hem of your dress

And place me on my horse with shield in hand and praise on your lips

Author's Note

Whew, did I have to write this one fast! Hope it is still authentic and someone is blessed by it. God Bless all of my friends who dutifully read my work.

Reviews

[Jeremy Baker]

Despite your confessed 'rush', the haste may in fact hace prompted the expression of deeper truths within you, raw and unpolished. The gloss of 'polish' sometimes covers over the real, and I for one enjoyed reading this as it is!

[Allen Smuckler]

you have a beautifully descriptive way of telling a story, Chris...
as in all your work, I enjoy where and how you take me to another time....another land
cellophane Man seems to contradict the medieval times you brought me to, but I suppose lovers have been looking through each other for eons...
A terrific write, Chris
allen

[Kenneth The Poet]

Cool work. It's amazing how quickly we can press out poetry.

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sweet wonderful write, enjoyed

[Sleepless]

love it !:)

[Shy Girl]

This is a beautiful poem. I have always been a hopeless romantic. I love to read historical romances. I do know that there was more to the poem then just the connection between he and his love. But the talent this poem took to write in just 30 mins...OMGoodness. Knights, her champion, ruddy faces, shields, jousting, I love the strong character fighting for her and for a cause greater then just himself. Just an exceptional read....30 mins. ....just....in awe. :)

[Dove]

This poem doesnt seem rushed, not at all. The title really caught my attention and the poem its self was amazing to me. You're so creative!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Nice poem about your wife!

[sivan]

another satisfying read... like the style you used it almost places me in another time and place.... love this line...I tout your praises to signal your holding of my heart

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Interesting, intriuging piece. Doesn't seem very rushed at all. Clever. Nicely done.