Cellophane Man

This is an older piece that I was challenged to write as an assignment and the constraints were a time limit of 30 mins. So, I know it is rushed but, I WAS rushed by the directive.

Cellophane Man

a poem by Chris

 

 

My faithful,dutiful commitment passes through the years

All sacrifices given freely and without measure

The growth of love is my charge

As a Templer Knight protects the grail with his service

 

 

I follow in tow

Stepping  aside in vocation, in residence

My meager hay-pennies add to nothing

And give no meat on the table

 

I am your ever willing cheerleader

When you win; we win

When I  believe; you achieve

My voice rises up above all others

 

I have swept aside other courtiers

I sing like a lark of your beauty, your brilliance

As a town crier alerts its citizens

I tout your praises to signal your holding of my heart

 

From the sidelines I wait

Ever vigilant and silent in my pride

Of the woman you’ve become

And the tower constructed well with crest flown high

 

My love, don’t look past

Don’t look through me like used cellophane

My self-denial has feed your flame

And I give support to your pier

 

Talents can’t be held back much longer

It roars like the bulls of Pamplona

My charge is fierce

For your Maker filled this vessel full

 

Come down from your tower and dry my tear

Take no more meetings and tend to your champion

Wipe my ruddy face with the hem of your dress

And place me on my horse with shield in hand and praise on your lips

Author's Note

Whew, did I have to write this one fast! Hope it is still authentic and someone is blessed by it. God Bless all of my friends who dutifully read my work.

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

You did quite well for this, even needing to write so much so fast. I like this, sort of medieval old fashioned and love the ending lines.

[Daytonight]

Well done! Another great work. Keep on penning.

[~Blue Fantasy~]

Very impressive! This is a wonderful story you have told! I truly enjoyed every word that you carefully chose! An amazing write!!

[patricia]

Phew! you wrote that in thirty minutes? I bet you spent a lot longer developing a mind like that. Loved it!
Favourite line: As a Templar Knight protects the grail with his service.
Thanks. Look forward to reading more of your work.

[LiberScriptus]

Wow- you wrote that in 30 min? Very impressive! I think you do a great job of portraying unrequited love and expressing the unfulfilled yet committed dedication of the speaker. I think the free form nature of the work really makes it seem organic, as though we were allowed a glimpse inside his head.

[Amila Jay]

Great write:)

[Poeticpiers]

classical in content. You rose to the challenge successfully

[An owl on the moon]

Though filled with glimmers of tears, you offer us a deeper hope and lifting word to raise us above the pain.Thank you for sharing such blessings!

[masqued_muse]

Should read, "My self denial has FED your flame?" OTHERWISE; fantastic, Chris. I do so love this time period, and you are are a masterful artist.
masqued_muse^^

[joshua deathdealer]

*claps* This is most excellent!! I adore the ending to the fantastic write..xx