This Damn Thorn

This Damn Thorn

a poem by Chris T.

 

A perfect plan detoured

An objective thwarted

My strength of foundation chipped

Like the salt soaked rain cracks concrete

Motivation slowly ebbs

 

My inner circle begins to notice the weakness in my armour

Little places for arrows to find its home

A brave face plastered on for the souls around me

Few see the real inner struggle

Nights of pain and swelling

 

I pull a thorn, another emerges

If I could cut you, I would twist my crysknife deep 

I would stand against you and take your water

But you are unseen

You remove little bits of life while I sleep

 

The crows gather and speak ill of me

Their words alight on the branches of half-truths

The daily grind is more arduous and cruel

Each day a small victory

Each moment lived is bone weary

 

Before this life-war, I gave to so many

Where are you; you takers of me

Why do you hide in my time of need

Why do your words of comfort fall short of my ears

Still I am not taken over by hate

 

Oh thorn, I will not lie down

You will have to take from my fist my chosen word

I will punch, claw, kick, elbow and finally bite

Until my teeth are broken and can find no purchase

I will not let you steal what you have not earned

 

My fingers will pluck your pricks from my flesh

Each day, each moment I will place one more step in front of another

I will run my race

Maybe not to win; but to finish, yes to finish

You will never have my treasure

And you efforts will be expelled

 

 

I will make my muscles rigid to push your pain from my tissue to fall from me forever

Author's Note

This is one of my oldest poems. Do you think you can tell the difference between my newer work(The Tree That's Rooted In You) and this old piece? Great to hear comments!

Reviews

[FJ Davis]

Powerful--indeed, stunning piece!
As for "takers" of you, they have mostly served to strengthen your spiritual development; bring you closer to the never-disappointing Lord. It has always been just God and you; inhabiting a personal internal universe.
And, from what I can see, Chris, finishing your race is winning.
May God heal protect and bless you.

[Priscilla Sayers]

I haven't read the new, but I am definitely diggin' this one.
Such paaion, such fire, such fight.
A strong one. Bold and fills me with the very image of you facing the pain head on.

[Droll Prole]

Thank you for posting this great piece of writing.

[patricia]

Thankyou for this...what seemed to me...a lonely search for those who understand. A voice crying in the wilderness. Thanks.

[Cherrie Palmer]

..I will not let you steal what you have not earned... this is a great line full of confidence and candor. I too have been writing for quite some time (decades really) and we do learn how to ease into a story as we age. Perspective of time and cause, flavor our words and make for interesting reading. This was very good.

[ivizarx]

Dam* this is good.... coffee.
Lol, and like good coffee I love, I love this poetic writing you've created here, it sways through my brain like the euphoric sensation of combination of caffeine and nicotine thriving in my blood flowing to my brain, atleast your brilliant writing deceives me into thinking so ;)
And yes, definitely can tell your old work from your new stuff, but it goes without saying that it differs in style rather than progression. great piece my friend.
personally I'm buddhist in different ways to the standard one, but it is not a topic of religion when it comes to respecting a man of respectable work by telling him on his own terms great job by saying: "God has bless you with a talent, and so may his watchful eye also cast a call for reach to aid when needed in times seem troubled, cause even though a downfall is inspiration for a poet, he needs a rope to pull himself out of the well"

[joshua deathdealer]

Such powerful and refreshing work..wow

[T.W. Early]

This was very different and I liked it.

[Broken Melody]

i can tell the difference between your old work and the new stuff. your writing has improved alot, and you should be proud of yourself.

[TreeSpirit]

WOW!!! I love this piece! I love the symbolism and the "color" that the poem itself has :)

[Maryum Mazhar]

Love the emotions through out,
great, fast paced read,
I really have to say...........................................
A+!!! :D :)