Burden, Oh Burden

Burden, Oh Burden

 

A Poem by Chris

 

Big Burden, big burden why do you crush?

Turning my voice to a soft gentle hush.

Big burden, big burden why won’t you leave?

From around my neck you must now cleave.

 

Burden, oh burden where is my air?

Gone is my joy replaced with despair.

Burden, oh burden release your hold.

For this stone is heavy, dirty and cold.

 

Burden, my burden why did I choose?

To fall for your trick, to fall for your ruse.

Burden, my burden I’ve carried you far.

And I have grown used to your jagged scar.

 

This burden, this burden doesn’t relent.

It never gets tired or emotionally spent.

This burden, this burden likes to remind.

It whispers, it yells and never is kind.

 

Now burden, now burden I learned the truth.

Gone are the days of my hasty youth.

Now burden, now burden your secret’s laid bare.

For your weight is oppressive the more that I care.

 

Go burden, go burden a Saviour has died.

And He is caring of His precious bride.

Go burden, go burden I hear the Master’s call.

To let go of my yoke and now watch it fall.

Author's Note

I wrote this poem while I was struggling with some serious health conditions that continue to plague me today. I wanted to capture the droning effect a disease state has on a person. I hope I did just that. Enjoy.

Reviews

[Kat Collins]

You definitely captured the heavy burden that a chronic disease bears on a person. I, too, deal with a chronic pain disorder and there are days when the burden is difficult. It's a poignant reminder that Christ died for us to lift those weights from our backs. Your rhyming scheme just further impacts the truth of your words.

[Star Wolf]

This describes how a disease would slowly creep in or the weight of some other problem weighing heavily on the soul. I really enjoyed reading this.

[Sleepless]

you did ! this is amazing :)

[~Blue Fantasy~]

A beautiful write! Yes our God is a yoke detroying God!!! May this poem help and minister to others. God Bless everyone!

[Enigma]

An amazing poem. Though the burden represented your health issues, for a reader, it can have a wide range of interpretations. So many issues 'burden' our lives and cause much the same suffering as you wrote in your poem. Also, the repetition is absolutely amazing. I loved the flow and the rhymes feel perfect.

Well done!

[Dove]

I love the repetitive pattern and the over all tone is this poem. This piece tells a stroy and the rhyme scheme its just so perfect to me. Wonderful job!

[Y.F.]

This poem is written in fairly simple language, very repetitive, and yet has a certain charm and an old atmosphere to it.
It tells a story, and tells it clearly, with great talent embedded.
Looking forward to reading more myself. :)

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Wow...
Excellent rhyme scheme and excellent penning!

[Sakib]

It made me read it again and again. Nobody loves to carry that burden. Your frustration reflects here nicely. The flow of the poem is nice too. Thanks for sharing.

[rwar ish me]

This is just wow.
I love this piece.
Asking and no anwsers.
And the ending was utterly wonderful.