Burden, Oh Burden

Burden, Oh Burden

 

A Poem by Chris

 

Big Burden, big burden why do you crush?

Turning my voice to a soft gentle hush.

Big burden, big burden why won’t you leave?

From around my neck you must now cleave.

 

Burden, oh burden where is my air?

Gone is my joy replaced with despair.

Burden, oh burden release your hold.

For this stone is heavy, dirty and cold.

 

Burden, my burden why did I choose?

To fall for your trick, to fall for your ruse.

Burden, my burden I’ve carried you far.

And I have grown used to your jagged scar.

 

This burden, this burden doesn’t relent.

It never gets tired or emotionally spent.

This burden, this burden likes to remind.

It whispers, it yells and never is kind.

 

Now burden, now burden I learned the truth.

Gone are the days of my hasty youth.

Now burden, now burden your secret’s laid bare.

For your weight is oppressive the more that I care.

 

Go burden, go burden a Saviour has died.

And He is caring of His precious bride.

Go burden, go burden I hear the Master’s call.

To let go of my yoke and now watch it fall.

Author's Note

I wrote this poem while I was struggling with some serious health conditions that continue to plague me today. I wanted to capture the droning effect a disease state has on a person. I hope I did just that. Enjoy.

Reviews

[Kat Collins]

You definitely captured the heavy burden that a chronic disease bears on a person. I, too, deal with a chronic pain disorder and there are days when the burden is difficult. It's a poignant reminder that Christ died for us to lift those weights from our backs. Your rhyming scheme just further impacts the truth of your words.

[joshua deathdealer]

I like the repetition. Reads like it was seemingly intended. A prayer. Beautiful work.

[Daytonight]

Very well done. Inspirational and uplifting in the end. Keep on penning.

[sivan]

Love the poem and its overall positive strength of fighting for release and not giving in to the "burden"
Most powerful line for me was: "Burden, my burden I’ve carried you far.
And I have grown used to your jagged scar."

[Jeremy Baker]

This writing has a very rhythmic, musical aspect to it. I wonder how this would sond being read aloud, or even sung? I think you achieved your aim admirably.

[Wolf's Dark Song]

This is very nicely done. It reads well and the message is a hopeful one.

[Dark Beauty]

Powerfully written and well written for the message! Great work and thanks for sharing!!

[HeIsWe]

I like this

[Lemontine]

wow, that's really powerful. sometimes we feel as if we are tied to some sort of weight and can't get loose. I love it!

[Thea]

"Burden, oh burden where is my air?
Gone is my joy replaced with despair."
That was really great, I swear...Makes me think of my own burden too...Gotta like this! :)))

[K.C. Zbryk]

The repeated words really pound home the way the disease effected you. Very well written, and good show of faith.