All I'd Give

A love poem about all the things a boy would give to the girl he loves.

If I could bottle every star,
and wrap them up for you,
I would tie a ribbon to the moon,
and give that to you too.

 

I would give you everything if I had the power;
I would give you shooting stars;
I’d send them down in showers
and you could make a thousand wishes,
or just sit and watch for hours.

 

I would give you every dream
and hope I ever had.
I would be there to cheer you up
when you’re feeling sad.

 

I will hand my life to you;
I will show you that I’m being true;
I will see my promise through;
I will prove my love to you.

Author's Note

thank you to Perfectionis at Heart for pointing this out, but I had forgotten to mention that I wasn't really going for a particular rhyme scheme for this poem.

Reviews

[insanity]

Definitely digging the name, the Mad Hatter has always been a personal favorite of mine. That aside I completely get what you're going for here, it's that love we've all felt when we meet that someone special, it's the kind of love that once you find it you want to share it and let everyone know how great it feels.

The imagery was very well done, I especially like the portion about the shooting stars and the wishes. As for a rhyming scheme you used one that I use quite often myself when writing poems/songs which is the sort of abcb sort of rhyming scheme where the second and fourth(or in the second stanzas case third and fifth) rhyme and the other two or three lines in the stanza do not.

All in all, well done, it's short and to the point and while it may not have the length that some other poems do you made up for that in terms of creating imagery.

[A.M. Everlasting]

I like this poem a lot, but I think your rhyme scheme is a little all over the place. Just an opinion, however. It doesn't change how much I like this. Thanks~