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A stringent stain on a silk heart

She doesnt remember where the trail of tears starts

She clutches tight and holds her daughter

searching for a remnant of light of tomorrow

once soft as silk now stone and cold

only a shell of what she withholds

strength not for herself but the one she holds

with stern determination never to fold

a Stranger comes and take her hand

He converses her and learns her plans

she forgets her fears and walks with Him

They come to a place where the rain ends

He says I'll take you to a place where the pain ends

just open up your heart and let Me in

when you thought you saw the end; it was the end

only it was the end of your hurt, today is a new begaining

Reviews

[Jules]

I like the alliteration!! plus the choice of words is pretty good as well!!! I like the idea of salvation between these two characters its well put forth!!
There are some spelling mistakes that kinda put me off though: "remeber" (l.2), "remnent" (l.4), "stregth" (l.7), "strern"(l.8), "take"(l.9), "begaining" (last line)
but still nice!!