Warped.

mosh pit? yeah, mosh pit.

I'm just about sick of standing in this f*****g mess

up to my ears in other peoples sweat

feeling heartbeats that just arent mine

Blisters on my feet from waiting in line.

People keep hitting my sunburns

and stepping on my aching feet

as we wait for them to take the stage.

If only theyd take the stage.

The groupies carry themselves up the stairs

huge sunglasses and high heels,

my sore a*s says their well prepared.

I think I feel the air get a little bit hotter

just a little bit harder to come by.

and now im switching my weight

from one bleeding foot to another

wiping someone elses sweat from my shoulders.

telling some obnoxious girl to get the f**k out of the pit.

praying to catch a drumstick and wishing theyd take the stage.

If only theyd take the stage already.

 

and then a cymbol crashes,

and an amp screams

and I hear voices raising

but not nearly as loud as mine.

And even though I can feel myself jumping

I swear my feet havent touched the ground in three whole minutes

embracing the bump of other peoples bodies

Air is hard to swallow down here in heaven,

might as well surf

don't bother helping me to my feet

I'll let the crowd carry me home.

Author's Note

Warped Tour.
Say Anything mosh pit. 7/1/08
amazing.
picture I took of the lead singer from the pit. yeah, I was thatttt close. =]
not even reading over it right now. Too tired. later.

tell me what sucks.

Reviews

[No]

warped, oh warped.
possibly one of the most miraculous experiences available to human kind. (ok, so that was a stretch of the imagination but...)
this stilll captures the eseence of warped perfectly. "feeling heartbeats that just aren't mine" and "wiping somebody else's sweat off my shoulders".
that hits the spot.

[Zatoichi]

I think HH's review says it all. wait a minute...

this comes to mind: the hell you describe is so well-written that I feel like I was there.

Therefore, the exultation you feel at the band's arrival needs to be kicked up a notch, maybe? The last part needs to convey as strongly, or more so, why you endured all you did to get there. The imagery is compelling; the "maybe" is because I'm not sure if I'm just being nitpicky. Go with what feels right because you've got great instincts- it's a good read as is. thanks

[Hedra Helix]

Ahhhhh makes me miss it sooooo!! puts me there!!!! havent been in a crowd like that in 3 yrs whats wrong with me f**k..Sooo real for me, the air getting that shade hotter, harder to get;)

Dude made me excited from the first sentence in.

a*s says their(they're) well prep

[Jeff]

I thought that this was really good! It captures the general feel of the crowd in/around the pit. You can't stand the pit or the people in it until the band you want comes on, and then it really is heaven! There were some grammatical/spelling/punctuation issues, but I'm sure you'll find them when you go through it again.

Again, well done and thank you for sharing!