Ramen And Dirt.

George.

I still miss the burn from when we used to melt together

and when I take the restraints off my brains

they still run straight for you.

 

The last 29 weeks have all been Fridays

no amount of Tide can get rid of your smell on my sheets.

energy is hard to come by when you're living off ramen and regret.

 

The soil is bound to give way to the weight of my cliche lines

pain cooked overeasy and fucked up lies

I just hope i never stop falling.

 

No, I never want to stop falling.

 

Author's Note

would you know the darkside of the moon if you saw it?
totally irrelevant, i was just thinking. how do you know theres even a darkside of the moon?
how would you know if your all the way up in space? its dark up there , anyway.

the pic is of me swinging. wooo.


get rid of the last lines?

Reviews

[lark]

The last 29 weeks have all been Fridays
no amount of Tide can get rid of your smell on my sheets.
energy is hard to come by when you're living off ramen and regret.

Have you ever heard of Wild Sweet Orange (band)? They're like a sadder Bright Eyes...
This kind of reminds me of them.

Keep the last lines.

[vive la bella]

hella good =]

[Last Lying Look]

love it. really had me going.

[Mariah]

No. Keep the lines. I love them.

[Zatoichi]

i've attempted to review this poem 3 times now. i like the imagery but i'm unsure about the last 3 lines. i think it would work without them.

4th line- capitalize Tide i'm picking nits here i know

maybe if i was familiar with the game you mention, the last 3 lines would work for me better.

[Dug]

Had me from the title.

[Hedra Helix]

look at you adding s**t;) dope

[No]

i'm glad someone's going to say f**k.
i've been reading a whole lot of work on here and nobody's had the guts to say "f**k".
sorry for that,
but i love this poem
and the way it tells youeverything you need to know,
but then makes you read it back
just to see what you've missed.

[Hedra Helix]

you bad a*s. im even getting tired of my lame reviews, but i cant help them, you keep going up, whatelse the f**k am i supposed to say?

kick a*s cool lines in this one, cultivate that.

"and when I take the restraints off my brains
they run straight for you."

well isnt that the truth for everyone.
read lyttleton yet?

[Geoffers]

YOU're A CRAZY GOOD WRITER