Puddle of Chloe.

If that sweat on your upper lip is honest

 

then im just addicted to your love,

 

and its completely pointless.

 

My limbs are turning to jello

 

oozing and sliding out of my chair

 

heart completely exposed to your world.

 

heart feeling like its going to explode.

 

The sun glittering in from your window

 

is playing such a pretty light show through my tequila bottle.

 

only one kind of joint matters anymore,

 

and my body is just numb mush.

 

that warm feeling in my belly is spreading

 

through my legs and to my toes

 

and just as my eyes are closing,

 

left in a puddle of my jello body on the floor

 

i almost heard thought I heard you say,

 

"I think you need help, Chloe."

Author's Note

delete or keep?
change ?

Reviews

[Hedra Helix]

keep, serious yo i think youre becoming one of my favorite writers, honest.

oldschool edit




If that sweat on your upper lip is honest

[Suki]

keep : D

[dorkfish]

keep, i really like it, wonderful imagery here.

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

I think if it has gotten to that point maybe it is time to quit.
Hugs Debby

[RAWR!]

awww,
its a keep.

[Wisconsin]

Good

[Zatoichi]

keep

HH pointed out the only edit you need to make and I agree with her assessment.
I sound like a robot so I'll just say I like your poem. Now excuse me while I melt into my chair.