Underwater.

Got the idea from someone else, who is also a girl drummer. i had thought of doing it before but i never did. I'm using the titles from the songs on my favorite playlist.

I can Breathe Today.

the Inhale makes the exhale mean So Much More.

I'll throw my Bricks before you Blow Me Away.

All the Bullshit surrounding us proves

we Can't Be Saved.

we're in a Car Underwater,

and its time to Choose.

do you want a Clean Shot,

Or a Crimson flooded Crash.

your Cute When You Scream,

and im still Dancing For Rain.

Dismantle. Repair.

these Disposable Teens have no Good Left Undone.

Don't Pretend to be Dumb.

We can all see the Everchanging earth

as Every Sunday brings another Evolution

Ive got a Fat Lip and a Feel Good Drag,

don't put up those Fences,

I'm bringing Five Vicodin Chased With A Shot Of Clarity

The Fourth Drink Instinct is like Gasoline

and we're still stuck in a Car Underwater.

I can Handle This.

You've still got a tight grip on those Handlebars.

and ive still got your Heartshaped Box.

The Hole In The Earth isnt big enough for the both of us

How's This For Space?

Lets just stay underwater where we never need to Breathe.

Author's Note

Ohh mann. not sure it makes alot of sense. I'll probably delete this one, too.
that was kinda hard haha.

Reviews

[Anima Inspired]

I just stumbled upon this in checking out contests, and I have to say this is really impressive... I mean, I think this makes perfect sense, and the best part about it is the way that your strong poetic voice seems to really shine through. This is a touch "format" to follow (with the playlist song titles), and I think you've managed it VERY well...don't delete this one, it's quite good. I think that one thing that might make it even more interesting would be to do something to make the song titles stand out a little bit more, like put them in italics or maybe bold them...

Nicely written, and you have my vote in the contest!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

i love this again!

Chloe
xoxo

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

no, this is good, i like it .. a good job using song titles ... really love the last line .. very nice writing!

Chloe
xoxo

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

No, no! Don't delete it at all! I mean, hello? Mine didn't make a lick of sense and I'm pretty sure I did something wrong, like, eight different times. XD lol I think this was a very successful attempt and it really throws the reader into a nice ocean of imagination! :)

It makes me think of teens ready to quit life, but there are few good times that they come across... but from the last few lines, they seemed to have said, "F**k it." and just decided to leave the cruel life they were forced to live. ^^ That's what this poem says to me. :) Great job!

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood