Piranha Butterflies.

I saw you walking past my house yesterday

instantly, piranha butterflies flooded the lining of my stomach.

flipping it over and making it churn.

forcing me to remember the nights the s**t hit the fan

splattered everywhere, and left us to clean it up

with fake apologies and light hearted lies.

I swear I could blow a hole straight through to the other side

of what you think you know about me now.

I could recreate your thought process,

bring your knees to the earth.

We could start over, and just forget.

But then you turn around and spot me on my porch

earphones in place and laptop where it belongs

you give a smirk that could kill a kitten

and the piranha butterflies vanish.

Maybe I just had to s**t.

Reviews

[Dug]

Chloe, this is absolutely wonderful. Someday I want to learn how to give a smirk that could kill a kitten.

[Aeon Starr]

wow...
this was awsome!
i know you've heard this a lot of times but...
great ending it really was unexpected!
and it somthing that i can relate to as well!

[Suki]

wow this is the best. i love the ending its sooo...KEWL : D

[PianoandPage]

kudos for "light hearted lies" i am a sucker for great alliteration.

this poem left me a little confused. your dramatic and edgy imagery was captivating and unique. i really liked the vibe the poem gave off.

and yes "pirahna butterflies" is teh win.

[Dani California]

Talk about unexpected endings! lol!

Wow, I truly did not see that coming.
What a creative mind...!
Wonderful rhythm here as well...

You have a sense of humor like my sons..
they would love this!

Great writing!

[dorkfish]

wonderful ending, love it. rather unexpected, =). great job with this

[No]

kickass ending by the way.
i think the piranha butterflies sound hungry, maybe they should eat him.

[Alex]

I loved this.
Seems like itd be a love poem but its with a joke :P

p.s. Thanks for the review.

[Staci Brown]

very powerful! nice turnaround on the guy! lol definitely puts the guy in his place! lol well done!

Welcome to the Cafe too!

Faerie Blessings!

--faerie whisper (breaking the silence...)

[Davide.]

ahaha, best ending EVER.

"But then you turn around and spot me on my porch

earphones in place and laptop where it belongs

you give a smirk that could kill a kitten

and the piranha butterflies vanish.

Maybe I just had to s**t."

YUSS.