Day 13 Synopsis!

Synopsis for my new novel "Day 13"

Tal Calvary had a seemingly normal life until May 13th 2005, when he was awoken just befor midnight by three hodded fiures, dragging him off into the wods behing his house in Marblehead, MA, and repeatedly telling him that he is "the chosen one." And, "He must pick the others."
When Tal awoke the next morning he found himself in the middle of the forest, and did what any 12-year-old boy would do-He screamed for help. After being found by a police search party, hours later, Tal found himself back home, where a panic striken mother dragged him into a fearfull game of 20 question.

"Where were you?"

"Who were you with?"

The next day, Tal awoke in his bed where he had fallen asleep after a hard day of questions and answers, only to greet-yet again-his panic strike mother, who coinsidentally did not recall any of the previous days events...

Tal soon realizes that on the 13th day of every month he is sucked into a parellel dimesion. The things that occur in this demension have no affect on the events that occur n "reality."

Tal soon realizes that he is "The Reader." Tal posseses not only a unique power to view auras. He can also understand, or "read" them. Tal knows peoples emotions, states of sanity, and because he can see "connetion bands" betweent any to people within a certain proximity, he knows peoples bonds to one another, weather it be friendship, romantic, a family connection, or a rivalry. Tal knows whos nows who.

After a year of 13 Tal meets Alexia, Or "Lex" as she perfers to be called. Lex is anti-social, and sarcastic, with a very problematic home life. People dislike her because of her b***h like behaviors, and the way she treats others.

Lex likes to stay below the radar and hide from the world.

With Friday the 13th approaching, Tal starts to see someting new in Lex's Aura. Her aura is glowing a strange shade of green... And, soon, he knows what to do.

Tal taked lex to the same place where the group brought him on midnight before the 13th, changing her too into a 13. Lex is "The Minder"

Crossing between the two dimensions takes a lot of energy, and Lex's power enables her to absorb "energy"  (emotions: good, bad, happy, sad, health, sickness, fear, confidence etc.) When she touches people she can transmit her energy from her skin, and allow it to flow into another person.

This skill, also requires Lex to mind read (so that she knows who needs what kind of energy...) Now that she i mind reading, she knows what everyone thinks of her, enraging her more...

The story takes place 4 years after Tal became a "13" and he had yearl created, Lex, Aadyn (Aadyn is the "Shocker" She emmitts electric pulse and on physical contact will electricute any person she touches, however, she had some limeted controll over the vultage.), and Damion (Damion is the "Numb" He does not feel pain, and his body is very durble and will not be damaged by things that would normally damage through pain.)

This is the fifth year and the "13's" are 16. And, when Tal starts seeing the "glow" around Jenna Sanders, a popular cheerleader, nd infamous s**t at school, everyone is outraged.

But, friday the 13th is coming.... And, Jenna has to be changed...

But, ll the while, something else is happening. The 13 world is fading away-ending, and all those connected to it will be ending with it as well...

Author's Note

Typos. I got it. What do ya' think... Be honest, and pleeeease comment, please?

Reviews

[nemmm]

IIIII personally think it's great **coughcoughunlikemikecoughcough* and you should keep writing it.

[Mark]

Dear Immobile, (name, please?)
You are very young to be considering a work as ambitious as a book, but the fact that you are considering it tells me you have passion. Passion, however, is not enough. The errors in the above ms. are manifold, and are not just typos; there are flagrant misspellings, wrong-word situations, and grammatical gaffes. No editor is ever going to take you seriously as long as your English skills are so rudimentary.
You should not introduce new characters parenthetically, as you did Aadyn and Damion. I realize this is only a synopsis, but you might consider instead submitting complete chapters, in finished form, which include the five W's of each character AND situation: Who, What, When, Where, and Why. Read some of the longer works of others on WC, but DO NOT accept their styles as your own, or their grammatical skills as gospel--I have observed a great many errors in most of them as well.
I would suggest that you invest in a few books, including a Roget's Thesaurus, a Merriam-Webster Collegiate Dictionary, a Strunk and White Style Manual and Stephen King's "On Writing", for starters. Next, after a couple of years of High school English, try your hand at poems and essays, or hook up with your local newspaper and offer to write a few features or a column (Bonus: this will look good on a College resume!) Expose yourself to as many good, published authors of renown as you can--I'm talking about Michener, Clavell, LeCarre, Grisham here, not so much Rowling!
Best wishes to you. Take your time; God knows, you've got plenty of it!
PS: If you wish to email the above ms. to me, I will highlight the errors I mentioned; there is no modality here at WC which allows me to edit another's work. Hang in there!

[Brendan Kerestes]

i want to read this!