The Deed

I scream for help

But no one can hear.

 

I choke on words

That shouldn't be said.

 

But I have to tell someone

I have to tell Daddy what she's done.

 

I heard the moaning

When he was out of town.

 

I heard her bed squeaking,

The joy that escaped her lips.

 

I heard the man shush her

I saw them in ther bed.

 

Mother begged me

Not to tell.

 

But I can't hold it in.

The words beg to escape my lips.

 

Daddy's home

I run to him.

 

The tears well up

In my eyes.

 

I tell him

I tell him of all she's done.

 

The relief

Is like a ton of bricks off my shoulders.

 

The pain

Is like a thousand orgasms.

:)

Author's Note

that last line...some ppl might not get...but the pain was enjoyable :)

Reviews

[JenLyn]

Very intriguing. I like the last line a lot it seems to sum a lot of them poem including the pain you felt of having to endure it and the secrets you had to keep and finally being able to let them escape gave you the same relief your Mother felt. I just have to ask though is this poem in the past or present tense because it seems like you're writing in the past tense but your Dad shows up while everything is happening which would make it present tense so maybe just clarify that a lil better. Overall a very good write.

[Chamil3001]

OMG! good lord thats kinky poem indeed.. senced some sorrow too

[Camille Corbett]

Man, that's a lot of orgasms. You mispelled a lot and you need to capitalize.

[r]

Wow, this is amazing. Just...wow. I loved it.

[nickchidiac]

i like it a lot, the end is sort of abstract and makes me think and interpret in my own way. Also the story is clever because either way this person has to betray either their mother or their father which sucks but makes for awesome poetry. thumbs up.

[Jane Doe]

iyiyi hope thats not true
but i like the point n all
beautiful
luv it
luv ya
-sugar dumpling muffin baby pumpkin pie:)

[Bexfinch]

oh its so sad adultery is horrible good write

[Revolved]

This is great. It's a bit sad for what the mother has done, but it's what some people face in real life. The ending i did enjoy :D Nice one ;)

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad tale. The child did right. You create a situation that had to be repaired. people do foolish things in a life. many things i would take back if i could. A very good ending. A very good poem.
Coyote

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a good write here. :)
It was good. The last line made me laugh for real. Well giggle anyways the poem had a nice message anyway. Don't hide something someone should know. Good write. :)