Tears

sad

 These tears have left tracks on my face,

My cheeks are sunken in,

I've one track for everytime you hurt me,

I ask my best friend what to do,

She told me,

"Cry a river,build a bridge, and get over it,"

I tried,

I tried so hard to cry,

But all of my tears have run dry,

So I moved on to the next step,

I tried to build a bridge,

But with other guys,

It doesn't feel right,

I ain't got no river,

I don't have a bridge,

Looks like I'm stuck,

Cause there's nothing to cross,

How am I supposed to move on now,

I was dining at my favorite cafe,

I saw you there,

Finally the tears are running,

I run to the restroom,

I look in the mirror,

To see,

These tears have left tracks on my face,

My cheeks are sunken in.

Author's Note

i know it says I ain't go no and I know thats a grammer error but it was meant tht way

Reviews

[Ophielia Nyx]

i like it alot but your poems ive read all have to do with sadness i hope you feel better

[The Perfectionist]

The poem is average on the side of good for the most part, but it has two really strong points. The mirrored beginning and ending (while an old trick) works really well in this particular piece, and the middle part of the poem is strong. The rest of it however, somewhat trips over itself as far as rhythm goes. The words have power, but you need to build appropriate structure to convey it.

[Chelsea.]

thank you for the review :)
This was different, but good.
Kind of hard to explain.
Its like.. im not sure how to word it.
You have to connect ideas, maybe?
sorry, lol.
But nicely written.

[Hello, Goodbye]

I love the open honesty that you display. It reveals the deep sadness that you hold, and lets it free for the rest of us to be able to take a hold of it and convert it into something constructive. Thanks for sharing the pain.. it made a great piece of poetry.