The secret side of me chapter one

Introduction to the fantasy novel.

''Jasmine, hurry up!'' My sister cara squealed from outside our cottage ''come play with me!' I smiled from the window at her and put down the drawing I was working on. Cara wasn't my biological sister but I loved her just as much as I would have loved my biological sister who I never met. i never knew my mom, dad or anyone other members of my biological family. For all my life I had been living in a forest along with a group of healers that are basically my family. My dad told me that my real family were all dead, had been murdered one night in a nearby village and I was found on the floor in my dad's room on the floor. I was only a baby. the King was devastated when my family were murdered as he and my real father were close friends and practically brothers so that brought me and the King kind of close. me and my family were hosting a barbecue and even King rotart came which surprised everyone outside of my family as he only visited people he was close with such as my family. I get up off my bed and walk over to the front door, throwing it open. The day was clear and bright, the kind that made everyone relaxed and cheerful.

Author's Note

Tell me what you think :) not the full chapter

Reviews

[David Jae]

It does well to set the scene, although I feel there could be more dialogue. Also, you need to mind your punctuation and use of capitals. You spell Cara with a lower 'c' once and Mom and Dad should have initial capitals, too.

There's a lot of potential here. Good job...