Turning Point

A turn in my life means a serious change,and why not someday

Someday has come and gone over and over always a delay

Why, I ask myself do I believe in things  deep in my heart I know will only cause pain

Spinning in a cycle of nothing to gain

Time and time again being let down only to return to the deadend

If I could have no emotions the message I would send

Send a huge duffelbag of torn apart hearts

Broken promises and dreams that have no remorse

I believed in all the tales told to me of course

Is it too late for life to turn about or have I been put into a pit

A pit of my lonely heart agonizing over my lost wit

A shame to say I was a fool to let it go

Just make this turning point and who will  I show

Maybe we are strong enough

Reviews

[Angel's Lady]

Spinning in a cycle of nothing to gain - this is such an excellent line! Great job of getting this rant off your chest! haha Beautifully written and very meaningful. Good job!

Just make this turning point and who will I show - Well, you will show yourself, of course, and that is the most important person you know!

[A.r. Bazian]

really nice flow...
great techniques and deep message!
you've got it all!
nice poem!
keep it up!

[JC Fox]

I do agree a very strong message in this poem, great job, the flow was nice and so were the visuals

[SweetPeachesAlways]

Send a huge duffelbag of torn apart hearts
Broken promises and dreams that have no remorse

Wow! Very powerful message in this...good rant, too! I especially love the two lines above, although rereading it, I find that almost every single line is a separate poem in and of itself! Very good!

Well, all I have to say is, Ching$Ching! Good job!