Goodbye my love!

In loving memory of all that have lost there loved ones...this is my loss!

I close my eyes and all there is darkness
Then you come to mind and the darkness Is no more
I kiss you! That's when I know its nothing but a dream
Its been a year since you've been gone
Memories of you flood my head
I can't cope! am drowning in these floods
I can't breath! am breathless
Like an injure little bunny am helpless
I try so hard to hold on to your memories but the pain is too much
I wake up and the pain intensifies
Grasping reality with a concious
So many times I have contemplated cutting myself
Seeing myself bleed but your memories bring me back from the dark abyss of depression
Is this how fate chose to divide us
Was our love so wrong to be fated ill for destruction?
I wish I could feel your skin on mine...
Feel your lips on mine
Disappear in your warm embrace
Wish I could hear laughter...
My heart is as cold as that of a soulless iceberg
There is never a day I do not think about us
There is never a time when you're never with me
So close I can feel you yet so far that it kills me slowly inside
How do I love again when all I love is you?
Tears can not soften my heart, all they do is water the love I have..
I couldn't acknowledge that you left now I do...goodbye my love,
My best friend,
lover,
soul mate,
best achievement and inspiration.

Author's Note

I appreciate criticism that's constructive because am but a humble student! Thank you for taking the time to read and review it!

Reviews

[Brianna]

I think this is a beautiful piece, as for criticism I'm not very good at giving it. My favorite was the first two lines. I think you could do away with the... maybe instead space it out more, I think it would have the same effect. This is a brilliant poem and I really enjoyed it. :)

[Magnus]

Brianna thank you for being my first reviewer, the first to appreciate this piece! I am humbled!

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful words and places my friend.
"So many times I have contemplated cutting myself
Seeing myself bleed but your memories bring me back from the dark abyss of depression
Is this how fate chose to divide us
Was our love so wrong to be fated ill for destruction? "
Sometime we do try to hurt ourselves. I try to do it with alcohol. I was lucky. Saved by the eyes of children needing someone to care for. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Ana B.]

Beautiful in its sadness....loved stopping by :)
the loss cuts us deep....
and then are the scars...
there is no point to weep....
just wish at the stars....

[maria ( rose)]

I got chills reading that beautiful poem. love reading your heart. keep that HOPE alive !!! I always do.
I Believe in the power of Love ♥ thanks for sharing
maria

[Magnus]

I appreciate your remarks and taking youyr time to read my work!

[maria ( rose)]

anytime :) see you again..

[Cailean]

A very powerful piece that did bring a tear to one of my eyes.

Remember, when you have loved someone, there is no distance between you. They are with you, come what may. Love is a gift that gives back.

Do we lose love? No. Sometimes we lose the aspects of love. Sometimes we lose the things of the material. But the love itself? It is not lost. It is eternal.

[Magnus]

Indeed! Thanks! I like these words, we never lose love!

[Lizardo]

That is wonderfull, and very beautifull. you have talent for this. incredible poem.

[Magnus]

Lizardo Arias thank you!

[Lizardo]

You are welcome

[TJ Wood]

That's deep man. I like it! Did you cry writing it boy?

[Magnus]

TJ unfortunately some of this happened so its just me putting it on a paper and uploading.

[TJ Wood]

Fo sho that is the best writing man

[Terrence Chang]

I think you should write "injured" instead of "injure" in the 8th line. Never the less it is a nice pice

[Magnus]

Mr. Chang thanks for that correction I appreciate it! And thanks for taking time to read

[Terrence Chang]

No problem and also your welcome