Violin, Sing for Me

My longest poem yet! Ha ha!

Violin, sing for me, a sweet, sad, haunting melody

Unleash from the crypt a long lost bitter memory

Seduce mine ears, and whisk the heart away

Mischievous faerie, kidnap me during the day

You chords cry and soar, touching angel's souls

Stopping chore duties, and drying bread rolls

 

Dye this colorless day with scarlet emotion

Enchant the mental process with your potion

Resting on a musician's shoulder, I pine for you

Melancholy reaches a boiling point, explodes, it's blue!

Caustic elf, make me beg, and fly me to heaven

You witch, a sorcerer, much more brilliant than Melvin

 

So soothing, so frightening, gives me chills

Gliding on a balance of masterful wills

Alone making me giggle, tickling till I start to cry

Movements of a saw, grinding the guts, so sad I'll die

Slowly up and down, rhythmic heights of joy

Playing with the strings, a child with his toy

 

Stay by my side, never leave me choking on silence

The boredom gnaws on my introverted mind, you give me guidance

Distract me from this present time, chase me toward fantasy

Breathe your magic, and make me alive, with your necromancy

It is all pish and posh, whit and poppycock

I'd rather drift off to the Shire, than listen to rock

 

Fiddle, dance for me, cascade crazy tunes

Pile lovable drunkards on hay dunes

Sting hairy feet to make them skip and hop

Instead of dancing robots, who lock and pop

Take me back to the green meadows, the outback

Where phantoms hide in tall grass, and it's all wack

 

Violin, sing for me, and encourage erotic thought

Fiddle, dance for me, even though how hard I fought

To loosen the tight grip of jolly temptations

The music comes and out ways all of my vindications

So close and familiar, yet alien and distant

There is no escape, no excuse to resist it

 

Sapphire tears drop on the marble drawing room floor

Maple wood body, sleek and rippling, makes me want more

Fits of depression seize my eyes, tears fall like crystal

My warmth and your cold, it is startling, so mystical

Demon spider, wrapping me up in your white sharp thread

Gently rocking me, in the night, tucking me in bed

 

The stage is set on fire, so is your frostbitten fingers

Your crescendo impales, the force and pain lingers

You murderer, taking lovers' hearts while they're alive

Only to awaken them, to torture, then to revive

You collect the tears and praise, even when they may be blind

Lover, waltz with me, and imprint true insanity on my mind

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

I made up some words so they'd rhyme, and I'm not too happy about that. D: I worked a long time on this, but I think I could've made it a lot better. :)

Reviews

[Azriel]

wow, i truly am floored by this piece, i think this is one of the best pieces i've read on here, i really cant say much about this... honestly though i love it, it truly is an inspiring piece to say the least... from the beautiful imagery to the flow and the form, and the reoccurring musical themes and language... everything is just perfect.

[Chidoriflower]

Oh, thank you so much!! :D :D :D

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

A wonderfully descriptive piece of poetry. I've read many of yours and this is by far the best so far.

[Chidoriflower]

Thank you so much!

[Bluefire]

This is really good, I love the ideas swimming around in this pool of chaos.
I got lost a couple of times and had to read it again but I think that's just because I'm tired. XD
Very well done, I think this is my favorite of yours. ^^

[Chidoriflower]

Thank you very much! :) I've been kind of tired also, with school and stuff. XD

[Bluefire]

No problem, and that's alright. Unfortunately, everyone's gotta deal with the screaming beast known as reality once in a while. ^^

[Rocans]

I like some of the words you use to describe your fantastic realm though as you rightly pointed out it could have been better. in one of your lines you said "out ways" instead of outweighs. And in some parts you seem to be forcing sentences to rhyme (like you also said). But apart from that this poem receives a high rating from me due to its effectiveness in painting a surreal image. Good write overall.

[Chidoriflower]

Thank you, the review is very helpful. And somewhat soothing. :)

[Leslie Philibert]

This works very well,enjoyed the carefully chosen spelling ( faerie, a la Spenser), most of the rhymes are fine, it might be worth looking at heaven/Melvin and back/wack, but with some small changes this can be even better, good work.

[Chidoriflower]

Thank you for your satisfying observation. I am very grateful for it.

[quinfinn]

well, you're not gonna like this much but........this is, without a doubt the best thing you have ever posted . superbly penned and very meticulously thought out, this is a gem of a poem, a true triumph and pure gold...this gets my highest rating i allow anyone.....and a home on my favorites page. well done!

[Chidoriflower]

Oh, thank you so much; I am honored! :D

[PurpleQuartz]

I really love this!!! Great job!

[Chidoriflower]

Thank you! :D

[Akashi]

I couldn't read the whole thing, waay too much for me. You seem to type your poetry really quickly, nice job.

[Chidoriflower]

The only comment you have is you couldn't read it all the way? D: You don't have to go through the effort to review. Ok. Thanks anyways.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Quite good. Reminds me a lot of David Lewis Paget's work.

[Chidoriflower]

Wow! Thank you ever so much, my friend!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Give him a read. He's here on the site someplace.

[Chidoriflower]

I will.

[StayAnchored]

That was amazingly beautiful! I love the lines...
"Dye this colorless day with scarlet emotion
Enchant the mental process with your potion"

You did a fantastic job! :D

[Chidoriflower]

I appreciate your review! Thanks! :)

[StayAnchored]

You're welcome! :D