A Little Help

It's too dark
It's too cold
Been so long
Since I've been home
Seems like always
An uphill climb
Give me some hope oh won't you
Give me a sign

I'm so tired
Can't move these bones
I've been carrying a heavy weight all on my own
I've seen miracles
But where is mine
Give me some hope oh won't you
Give me a sign

Cuz everybody needs a little help sometimes
Give me some hope oh won't you
Give me a sign

Maybe if I close my eyes
Somehow you'll make it better
Maybe while I sleep tonight
You'll put me back together
Maybe with the sun rise
You'll shine a little light inside
...Cuz everybody needs a little help sometimes

Reviews

[kitty blur]

Is this going to be a song? I think it should be a song. :)

The rhythm of it is wonderful - I had no issue following along with it the whole way through. I felt a lot of longing in this poem, a lot of reaching out, and I understand that. Instead of being just a poem about your struggles, the inclusion of 'everybody needs a little help sometimes' shows that you're not trying to go through your issues alone. There's also some motion in your poem that I picked up. I can see it all moving forward, starting with your issues and needing a sign, to feeling tired and sore, to finally making it home to sleep. It ends on a hopeful note. I picture it like... you finally came home, snick into bed beside the person, and maybe they'll fix things when they wake up. But for now, you sleep.

I kind of went off on my own thing there, but overall, nice poem.

[Chekochan]

Thank you so much! That means a lot to me;)) and yes it is a song !