Animal InstinctsA Poem by Created UnfinishedPlease critic :))) I know my comma placement is bad. I tried to use them for when I wanted the reader to pause. I know this is used in poems, but it feels wrong to me to do so still.In the summer, she came to me. Amidst the sun and the breeze, Along the mountains and red cherry trees, Past the tourists and the ocean that made everyone feel free. I sit, watching the sun, hating everyone Too bright and too windy I ignore children and parents alike. Through a humanless woods, I make my way. Birds are my radio. Squirrels my entertainment. Even the bugs, are friendly here. Down a trail, only known by me, I walk three miles. Thickened thorns and overgrown vines, invite me in and deeper I go. The lower the sun, the less it feels like home. I pause waiting to hear the birds or see the squirrels. Only the low growl of an animal can be heard. The sight of teeth and strikingly dark eyes, unsettle me. Two breaths more, I back away. Another and I know I'll be dead. Growling, it moves closer. I catch only a glimpse of her stomach still sagging from the weight of milk. With newfound affection, I slowly crouch down. My hands inviting and open. She sniffs the air and moves a step closer. I fear for my life, but I reach out my hand. Her fur is warm under my hand. Cautiously, my hand reaches further. Brushing off leaves and mud, she lets me pet her. Entranced by this unlikely friendship, I move in closer and sleep by her side. In the morning, I do not wake, I do not breath. Her children have come. And eaten me.
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StatsAuthorCreated UnfinishedTNAboutI live for the words that give my life meaning. Relationship: Taken PS4 @ Cheyzard I'm always looking to improve my writing so please comment. I will try to go through all my read requ.. more..Writing
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