Beg

I am back..............

I am your fading embers of yesterday’s love

Watching the curtains dance on today’s blue wind

I give your love one last look before the chill

The sun will not rise if we

 

Beg

 

Light not to tamper with your still features

The sepia tones cup your face in five o’ clock shadow

Rough lips I still taste clearly on my skin

The time passed by without

 

Me

 

Knowing your plans for when light touches your eyes

Moving the hair from my neck with the lips I taste

A kiss, and you will move to the way you came before

I will lay here so long as you want me

 

To

 

Stay and watch the curve of your spine fade

Seeing my eyes, but with no clear meaning to yours

My love touches my skin to glow bright orange flames

Seeing my eyes, with no clear meaning but

 

Love

Author's Note

Good?

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

Aww don't ask whether it's good or not. You don't need our validation to know you can write young lady :D

To be honest I never thought you left, but good to have you back in any case :)
I love the message spelled out in between the stanzas. It gives the poem another dimension. This is not the sappy you, but warm nonetheless, with strong sentiments and I like the last line,
"Seeing my eyes, with no clear meaning but Love"

Nicely done.

[Steve]

Good? haw!!! This is excellent! I love the style and the sensitivity.....very nice.

[Shante Payne]

Good?....Amazingly so!!! I love the hidden or shall I say alternate meaning of "Beg me to Love". This was a great read. Thank you

[cfix]

one word "Amazing!"

[Impulse]

Hmm...I hope you're asking whether or not it's good with your hands on your hips and a smirk on your lips. You know damn well it's good. Most of what you write is excellent. Good is a major understatement. I liked the imagery you've created in this one, and it flowed really well. I love how the lil words in between stanzas all connected at the end. Strong feeling throughout this piece. Great job.

[Elwina]

Beautiful imagery where all seems cotton and blur.
The whole poem is gorgeous in general.
I absolutely loved :
"The sun will not rise if we
Beg
Light not to tamper with your still features"
Love the fact that you split them, where both sentences around the beg tell a story and the three together have such another impact.
Plus I know those moments when the present is so magical you want time to stop, and the fact that the rise of day sometimes leads to loss.
Lovely read ! Always a pleasure with your work.

[The Cougar's Den]

*sigh* You had me at "Moving the hair from my neck with the lips I taste"...

[Member Now Left]

Beautifully written. :-)

[Jenny Nelson]

I think so. I really like the way it's set up. Gives a definite and strong feel of love, but puts it in a bit of a different light... not wishy-washy, but for sure romantic. Well done!

[Crowley]

yup.....this was fantastic. Good to see you back....and with a vengeance.