You're Art

Just a little scribble from art class, inspired by a quote.

Lines can be lips; dots of eyes

The burning color of auburn hair

Hips of stroke by gentle hand

Fimgers in tears and tiny rips

 

Lines are neither here nor there

The brown not make your auburn hair

The stroke fall short of jagged hips

Fingers not reach from tiny rips

Author's Note

"True art takes note not merely of form, but of what lies behind."

Reviews

[sammyj]

wow like this very much

[Isolophobe]

God, yes. THe beauty of an individual is epitomized here. I love how ambiguous it is too, its not exclusive to either sex, just their idiosyncrasies and beauty.

[emmajoy]

'Beauty is in the eye of the beholder' .. your words flow so wonderfully I can see what you see and that takes true skill. Amazing, isn't it, how just the right mark on paper or canvas can suggest something, just as a few words can suggest a masterpiece.

Lovely writing.

(typo line 4, lst stanza, think should be fiNgers) x

[An owl on the moon]

There is a subtle beauty expressed here in the form and flow... taking the artists message and moving to the ones around you.. I always loved art class and loved this!

[KL]

I like how you contrasted the similar stanzas with simple word changes (or 'strokes' ;)) that made the two mean completely different things. It's true, sometimes you can find the beauty in imperfection, and then other times there is nothing worthy of that inspiration. 'Tis what I got from the poem anyways. Very nice.

[Crowley]

You are into the art...I love that. This was a great short piece with a dashy cadence that makes it fun at the same time it is an observation piece that is full of lust or want. Nice use of the small changes in powerful lines...it adds punch. Great work sweet.