Hush

Keep your lips locked...

Hands; that of cotton, freshly washed.
Stroking, but with slight pressure; uneasy.
Warm like pavement on summers day
Caressing my back like it's common practice.

Lips; that of rainslicked concrete
Sliding, but with slight pressure; passionate.
Hard against my mouth with urgency
Closing every door to the rest of the world.

Tongue; that of cold, wet stone
Wrapping, but with slight pressure; teaching.
Taking the time to feel and take it all in
To show, and to learn, commit to memory.

Face; that of sandpaper
Scratching, but with slight pressure; urging.
Waiting, expecting utterance of the words I choke on.
Your breath on my ear coaxing them out of my locked lips.

Words; that of rose petals
Floating, but with slight pressure; demanding
The knowing nod you give moves my head with yours,
You wipe my tears from your cheek as you depart.

Author's Note

It may seem unclear...but that's how I intended it.

Reviews

[cest la vie]

Oh It's very clear My little Miss Romance writer.. nice to see you still have that niche firmly under control..
I like how you used the different areas of "loving" as a preface to a good stanza..

So who's the lucky guy? Ha!

[Brian Kraklau]

a kiss is eternal, so i blow a sweet kiss to you for writing such an enlightening poem

[Bette]

well done!

[Coyote Poetry]

A poem with a undertone of sadness. A hardness could be felt in each paragraph. A sad ending with tears as the final gifts. A very strong poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Reza Farahmand]

nice poem, i like it. please have a look on poems of mine, too. you may like them i am new here lol. i don't rate it coz i wanna read it carefully.

[Aven]

I really liked the structure of it, but also the use of words. A very poignant piece!

[Crowley]

This absolutely is one of your best. the structure and the writing are top notch, the feeling is engaging and romantic without being over the top. the tactile description is wonderful, I see it, taste it, touch it and hear it....Nice job sweet.

[child-of-promise]

I completely, totally adore this poem... one of your best... I want to marry and grow old with this poem...
the set-up is lovely... and I see your vocabulary is extending nicely :)
beautiful.
I hope you submitted this to a contest...

[Sam Severn]

I love, absolutely freakin' LOVE, how you've constructed this!!! "Hands/Lips/Tongue/Face/Words"!!! That is so BRILLIANT! A gorgeous poem, Cheyenne! ㋡

[B0Beauxs]

Again you show amazing ability for your age.

This has a really good flowing structure, and you have a really good imagination when it comes to metaphor.

Another beautiful poem.