One Man

He's changed me greatly...

Words

Like a soft whisper, a gentle touch, a brush of lips.

Who I am, you clearly state, beautifully.

My soul within every statement, subtle.

 

Flecks of hazel

Like mirrors, windows, a looking glass.

The ways you've molded my existance stare back at me.

The entirity of who I've become depicted in your eyes.

 

Hands

Like crutches, shelter, home.

The fingers wrapped round my expired heart.

The lines a long story, bleeding reminders of me.

 

Scarlet walls

Like a haven, a hideaway, nirvana at it's best.

A captive's bliss, welcoming.

A bird caged, yet entirely too content.

 

A man

Like someone to love, a guardian, a second chance.

Shaping me, perfecting me, who I am.

Who I've become part of him, part of us both.

Half my existance, a soulmate, a best friend;

A man.

Author's Note

I could never thank him enough. Here's a try at a start.

Reviews

[Impulse]

Nothing I can really say about this one because my words are not fit to describe such passion. Breathtakingly beautiful =]

[Crowley]

Lovely...a little piece of genius really. This is by far my favorite, although I say that almost everyday I read your stuff. You pour your heart into everything and that makes for good poetry. If this person is truly deserving of the pedestal you have put him on....he must have an equal view of you. Nice Job sweet.

[Sam Severn]

Heavenly and healing, this poem absolutely ROCKED ME! You write like you have glimpsed life and death, pleasure and pain, bad times and bliss, n' chosen to rise up and sing a celebration of one person's life!

My favorite verse goes: "Hands/Like crutches, shelter, home/The fingers wrapped round my expired heart/The lines a long story, bleeding reminders of me..." - BEAUTIFUL!!! ㋡

[Gomer LePoet]

This is really neat Cheyenne. good change of style and great words spoken.
One man sounds like one lucky man.

[Saturn's Lover]

Wow, this was beautiful, so eloquently said. You chose the perfect style and words, i can feel the emotion seeping off the page.