The Window

A symbolic poem. The window itsself represents something.

Glass decorated with rain drops

Streaming down so lightly

Silver panes surround the glass

My heart lies on the other side

I see him lying down in grass

Arms hugging his own chest

He turns to face the window

A tear falls from his eye

My fingers trace the panes

As I myself begin to cry

I knock on the rain stained glass

But no sound reaches his ears

I scream and cry; knocking harder

The rain falls harder and soaks me through

He lies there alone, vulnerable, shedding tears

That angel face should never cry

I cannot reach him beyond the window

My mind can only dream to hold him

I may only look upon his angel face

Tears falling off us both

I want so badly to hold him and wipe his tears

To take his pain and feel it myself

But the only pain I may feel

Is the pane that holds me away from him

Reviews

[Ishan Sadwelkar]

How sweet, soft and touching.
Full of lovely anti-climaxes and climaxes.
Visually strong.
Situationally vivid.

[Jenny Nelson]

I think you've done an excellent job here with symbolism, as well as with picturesque writing. I think this is likely to apply to all with something or someone. Great write!

[Crowley]

This may be in my top three of yours, very dark. Longing is such a great subject matter for poetry, it is probably the one thing that feels as painful as it does hopeful. Nice word play and the descriptive imagery was awesome. .

[Natalie.]

Bravo! The imagery and the feeling that you put into this poem were powerful and heart-rending.

[praying for help]

a window pane/pain. don't let pains/panes hold you back from anything. pain is important. always. listen to it! act...to relieve it!

great imagery!

[qaralynn]

amazing poem! it's really sad and beautiful
great work!!

[Elissa; the genuine art..]

This so profoundly beautiful!
It's kinda heart breaking actually.
Amazing work!
-Elissa :)

[Dittobug]

Beautiful, very expressive. I loved the last line. Homophones are very fun, ne?

This was a great read, thank you for sharing.

[child-of-promise]

I adore this poem... it's amazing, expressive, full of true feeling...

and bee bop, I know what the window is!!! :)

[Poeticpiers]

surrealistic almost nightmarish in your inability to communicate