Stricken

Deep, dark, piercing;

Yet so inviting.

Looking as though

There’s something hiding.

Beneath the dark

Lies something hidden.

To return, no,

That’s strictly forbidden.

They linger upon me,

And I return your gaze.

Terrified, I turn,

But you don’t stray.

Reviews

[Tamalthor]

nice! lol i like how you write!

[Coyote Poetry]

I love your use of words. Strong and with a purpose each one. A excellent poem. Direct to the point and a very good story.
Coyote

[Sexy P3nguin]

A nice read. It had a nice flow, which is often in short lined poems, but you wrte in away that is sorta new to me. I think what I am trying to say is that I have seen it writen like this before but this is one of the best.

Deep, dark, piercing;
Yet so inviting.

I really love those beginning lines for some reason. It may be the way you worded it or something but overall a great piece.