A Dream So Sweet

A kind spirit.
A beautiful soul.
A gorgeous face,
To fill this hole.

Dug so deep,
A horrid mess.
My heart has been broken,
It aches for the best.

The best kind of loving
I've ever felt.
When I hear that voice,
I just melt.

My dreams fulfilled.
Happier days.
Before us a castle
And a lake lays.

As you smile and say those words,
The music starts and out flies birds.

Reviews

[beccagarcia]

Chey this is Beautiful ! I miss ya gurrl (:

[pasdepoisson]

There does seem to be a pretty significant erotic component to the verse I think is native and appropriate. I think it's awesome you've found inspiration for so many different experiences of love in this work: from the physical to the metaphysical.

[Chesney W.]

thanks so much for the review(:

[Abhishek Ramchandran]

I like the truth in your writing :D The feeling you feel is the feeling most feel...... LOVE........ Really liked this poem :D

[Chesney W.]

thank you!

[rutherford]

Great expression of the promise of love. Favorite lines: "Before us a castle/and a lake lays." Beautiful couplet at the end.

[Chesney W.]

thank you so so much for enjoying and reviewing my work(:

[glasswindow]

I liked the feel of the poem. I wish you would have expanded on the castle and lake lines, they seem to come out of nowhere. Is this just a metaphorical castle and lake which symbolizes the realization of your love fantasies or is it a literal castle and lake? I think you are missing four lines lol. I have the same issue withe birds at the end of your poem, you make no references to them at all throughout the poem they more-or-less just appear which makes me wonder if they are literal or not. That all being said, what do I know, if you like the poem this way keep it just as it is. 90/100

[Chesney W.]

thank you. and I mean the castle and lake, as well as the birds, in a way that seems like a fantasy wedding. I'm sorry I didn't explain that out as much as I should have. but I'm thankful that you liked the poem, and I appreciate the review(:

[ALittleBitOfEverything]

Hahaaa, I'm actually sorta experiencing these feelings for the first time :3 Great poem :D

[Chesney W.]

thanks.. and those kinds of feelings are the best(:

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and hopeful poem for love. I like the way you described the feelings. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Chesney W.]

thank you for reviewing

[Hatchling]

This is beautiful! Keep up the good work

[Chesney W.]

thank you, and I appreciate the review(: