Black Box

Black box with silver lining.

Suffocating whatever's within.

 

The smell of rotting skin,

and rats eating you thin.

 

Many shed tear after tear.

Some drank beer after beer

to try to get you off of their minds.

 

The loss of a friend,

a mother,

a lover.

Now buried six feet under.

 

They all ask "why?"

and they still cry and cry.

 

The ground growing cold.

All of us growing old.

But for you, time stands still.

 

They wonder "will the bones remain?"

But I know the whole thing.

 

You asked God for forgiveness.

I was a witness.

 

Now you sit in your mansion

in Heaven.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. Strong description allowed the reader to fall into the poem. Somethings are not for us to understand. Beer and wine relax the sad heart and mind. I did like the ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Chesney W.]

thank you for the review

[Barnie14]

Welcome!

[Barnie14]

Really cool!

[Chesney W.]

thanks

[emmy bon]

unfortunately we all have to die someday... nice piece.

[Chesney W.]

yes, we all die someday, but in this piece, in the line "my time is coming and yours is ending" , I meant like my time to shine is coming, and they will be put in corner.... thank you for the review.

[Flo_writer]

To live is to die unfortunately...this read gives me a claustrophobic thought and makes me want to be cremated. It's dark and a bit puzzling. I wonder who is sitting in heavens mansion. Nice work here, the last few lines were well received.

[Chesney W.]

thank you

[Chance]

Nice work. This was a good read.

[Chesney W.]

thank you

[Jordan's Back]

It was dark, yet The last few lines, You asked god for forgiveness I was a witness Now you sit in your mansion in Heaven. Made it a happy ending. a 100 all the way!

[Chesney W.]

thank you so much

[Jordan's Back]

your Welcome :)

[Hamza]

superb write up ..
and i can say the best one to make each one of us realize that there is something that is inevitable, that is the ultimate reality, that is the only truth .. and it is the death, and the life hereafter ...
hats off lady ... for reminding us about this truth ...

[Chesney W.]

well thank you very much

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Great write. Death is depressing, but it is apart of life. You just wish people didn't die, but everyone will eventually. Thanks for sharing.

[Chesney W.]

thanks for reviewing and you are welcome

[Angie Diane♥♥]

You're welcome